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7/1/2011 11:23:41 PM

Juanita Warden
Posts: 24
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Kneeling at the alter deep in prayer
She asked for forgiveness in making an err
She asked God to show her, lead the way
She asked him to teach her how to pray

Kneeling at the alter with tears in her eyes
She begged for guidance in appraising her lies
She begged for repentance of her sinful ways
She begged for mercy for the coming days

Kneeling at the alter desperation setting in
She waited for the hopelessness to again win
She waited for an answer,something to show
She waited patiently to see if God would know

Kneeling at the alter she looked up above
She knew she could feel the warmness of His love
She knew that she was not in this world alone
She knew that He had her sitting upon His throne.

Kneeling at the alter her head again bowed
She thanked our dear Lord and then made her vow
She thanked Him for carrying her in bad times
She thanked Him for forgiving her of life’s crimes

Kneeling at the alter in total relief
She rejoiced at the thought of no more grief
She rejoiced in knowing that she found the way
She rejoiced and again she began to pray.

edited by Juanita Warden on 7/1/2011
edited by Juanita Warden on 7/1/2011
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7/2/2011 12:09:11 AM

Juanita Warden
Posts: 24
I am open to all comments..Thank you.
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7/2/2011 11:29:17 AM

alexis bracken
Posts: 6
Its got alot of meaning to it and its a really great poem i Think.
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7/2/2011 12:52:54 PM

Juanita Warden
Posts: 24
Thank you,alexis.
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7/6/2011 5:58:03 AM

zarin aarif
Posts: 1
lovely poem...lots of emotions ....keep posting....
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