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11/5/2017 5:30:21 PM
Damisrael
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A man breaks,
Even in his prime,
Those who have been gods,
How have they made it?
A man breaks,
Even when unwilling,
Cause the forces he opposes,
Are greater than himself.
A man breaks,
And the world suffer,
His strength he exhausted,
The world has lost another.
A man breaks,
Though unwilling,
But, what's the point?
Why was he proud?
A man breaks,
And losses his strength,
His pride - his strength?
And that make gods?
A man breaks,
And wants to cry,
Cause, all is lost,
His seeming friends are gone.
A man breaks,
When fear comes,
And timidity follows,
Then losses courage.
A man breaks,
And feels feverish,
Cause, he is in pain,
He is discouraged.
A man breaks,
The pain he cannot allay.
His pride is too high,
But, got misty eye.
A man breaks,
His pride can he save?
If he concedes defeat,
Will the world be happy?
A man breaks,
His tears, he has to hide,
He did not see the fall coming,
Humility is another pride.
A man breaks,
And cannot face the world,
But, he is still human,
And has yet otherwise claimed.
A man breaks,
But, that's his thought,
If he calls on God,
He may yet, make.
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11/5/2017 8:31:08 PM
Katheryn Moore
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I sent a great message. Its really likes it,but maybe u could use a bigger vocabulary
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