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10/21/2017 7:00:34 PM
Alia Smith
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Stupid and Worthless,
Sadness and Anger welling
up inside me,
unable to think
and form thoughts.
Keep on crying,
crying for your heart,
crying for the person
you once knew.
“Who Am I?”
“Do I Belong?”
“What Do I Want?”
These are questions
of the Mind,
full of curiosity and wonder,
and Heart,
full of Sadness, Anger, and Fear.
I ask myself,
“Am I Doing Anything Right?”
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10/23/2017 12:32:46 AM
Maryann Nope
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I like it but I think you should learn where to cut off your lines a bit better.
Other than that, reminds me of a teen angst poem, which I love.
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Maryann
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