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3/28/2011 5:57:43 AM

william kamen
Posts: 1
It was your silence that seduced me,
the silence of your gestures and your smiles,
the silence of your wide eyes and parted lips
gazing at me.
And in the silence where beauty once concealed
could no longer be heard,
the silence of your words
caused me to go astray.
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4/16/2011 11:28:31 AM

cory long
Posts: 10
I think you could do more with it. I think it is an awesome start.. But regardless I like it! good job!
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5/16/2011 10:45:37 PM

Matt Hunt
Posts: 10
Yeah, I'm like Cory. This just seems like part one. Keep at it man! Sounds good so far.
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