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5/14/2016 2:34:39 PM
Cynthia Roundy Posts: 1
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I can’t sleep Reality crashes into me like a heavy wave of misery andself-hate Street lights pass me by like little stars in the nightbegging me to stop before it’s too late I can’t stop crying and my demons won’t seize This pain is too much and I search for relief I try to resist the urge to cut my life short but in my headall I can think is “What are you even worth?” I’m trying to be brave and put a smile on my face and themore I think about it I realize, you are my saving grace. My shooting star that I wish I could hold, my fire thatwarms me whenever I’m cold I want to help pick up your broken heart You’re beautiful, an amazing work of art For once in my life I am happy and you are making me fallfor you But I don’t think the feelings are the same and so I try notto I’m sorry if it hurts you but my days I struggle to keep I’m having a hard time staying alive and I can’t sleep
(Please give me feedback on grammar mistakes i may have made and anything i could change in the poem. Thanks!)
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