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8/19/2015 12:31:13 AM Gabe Shelly Posts: 95	Darkness to Darkness we may pass Never knowing that was our last-- And who should know-- Not I-- A sweet revenge for living a life so long In summary, the first line hits on the point when we close our eyes we die...the second line states that we never know when that will happen...the third asks who does know...the fourth states the narrator does not...and the fifth line simply says it is better to live a long time not to... 8/4/'15 edited by Gabe on 8/19/2015 edited by Gabe on 8/19/2015 edited by Gabe on 8/24/2015
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8/19/2015 8:30:52 AM jill spagnola Posts: 12	Gabe wrote: Darkness to Darkness we may pass Never knowing that was our last-- And who should know-- Not I-- A sweet revenge for living a life so long 8/4/'15 edited by Gabe on 8/19/2015 edited by Gabe on 8/19/2015 -- jill
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8/19/2015 8:34:29 AM jill spagnola Posts: 12	I really do not believe humans should be privy to the future. It would entirely change my future and in this long blink of an eye, life-span would not be entirely free will any longer... , jill edited by sunshine williams on 8/19/2015 P.S. Do not take offense, it is kind of kool, but your verse gave me the chills! edited by sunshine williams on 8/19/2015 -- jill
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