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8/16/2015 10:43:45 AM SUNIL MATHUR Posts: 8	The view is one of rare and ineffable beauty as our plane passes over the Himalayas. Mountains, enveloped in dense forests embroidered with meandering rivers and streams exude the soothing radiance of green. The sky is a panoramic show of clouds appearing in myriad forms: layers of vapor surging forth; fluffy balls floating around or nestling against mountain peaks; a goddess majestically looking down; and soon, a lion looming through the mist. All at once, the show climaxes: it's clouds and only clouds crowding the scene. They look like mountains of snow outshining the real snowy peaks they now hide; as they hide everything else: even the blue sky peeping out through chinks.
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8/17/2015 2:03:11 AM Alfonce Choi Posts: 4	Sunil, I like nature, and your poem describes it wonderfully. There's no doubt, I can already see the sceneries and I love them.
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8/17/2015 4:29:24 AM SUNIL MATHUR Posts: 8	Thanks Alfonce for going through the poem. I am glad you liked it.
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