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5/20/2015 1:16:19 PM Diane M Quinlan Posts: 6	Ode To ‘Mother’Creator © Not only isit a marvelous happen chance in being able to have ‘shares’ in Mother Nature’sflora creations 'first hand'--- But, we arethen granted to sit before her, these ‘set tables’…. She, as our‘hostess’ serves ‘up’ an endless canvasing ‘kaleidoscope’ set for our eyes only! She temptsus again and again, into a fevered ‘hunger-fest’ to (pig-out) by and they are verymuch ‘ready’ with such ‘food for thought’! She has intuitively displayed her indulgent ‘realm’to overrun our 'minds' eye…. We are prearrangedto touch, taste/smell and become a convert--- It is; astrue, loyal, ‘voyeurs’ we now give our undivided attendance, when we are allinvited to her 'seasoning’ assemblies…. Theirwholeness is made perfect, even into their ‘finally’ timed performances! Her use andgift with bright shades and ‘tonal’ multi-folding colours complements more herofferings--- Whether, itis in her fauna show of velvety, satin and silky petal- flowers spendingtitillating fragrances…. Or, by useof her seasonally ‘varying’ cycles in weather modes; she always will spend all herwonderment and excitement towards her spectacular works! Her numerous‘paint-box’ colours with their different scents and shaded colours are craftedto allure us feverishly into inventive madness acts--- Just likethe moments when a (newly) box of crayons first opens up and invitingly nudgesthe painter and writer in 'us’ to recreate our own bountiful pictures withworded colour and paints…. Thus withour 'first hand' wonder/mental experience “Mother’, has never grifted, (aquestionable) blank canvas to work upon! We are agrowing world-wide nature loving group, dabbling our time away ‘amongst’ her ecospheres--- We have also‘gifted’; as well out our exhibited works…. Our own ‘piece-meals’ are proudly admired andprofitably ‘feasted’ upon! Many wonderfulinvites are sent out to for all to attend our (tabled smorgasbords) --- ‘Mother’,must be as proud and pleased when taking note, of all the vast, interpretationaland varied (personal) endeavoured styles made in her likeness…. We have been ‘qualified’ in her stead, to such‘artistry’ freedoms! We have been‘branded’ her slaves; as only a true slave driver can do--- We are meantto go through with our own ‘humbling’ efforts…. Our need anddesire to please and honour her great gifts with these our gifts aresurmountable! Ourenthusiasm to share our ‘Mother Nurtured’ talents among one and all to salivateand savour, is indeed a two-fold gift and made much more--- We can onlyhold her responsible for our inspirational madness every day, days in and daysout throughout time…. MotherNature, we thank you for the power you have given us again, and again and againto learn, create and live in your world. We areindeed time keepers and guardians to your ‘star studded garden! My writer’smind holds ‘never’ enough words to paint your magnificence--- There arenot enough means to ever do you justice…. Ourword/plays and colourful paintings are but a ‘stitch’ to your ‘dressed’canvases! Didee A true loverof Mother Nature’s works. Artist andpoet writing with ink and paint!
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5/20/2015 1:52:45 PM Bob Atkinson Posts: 294	Love it when a poem has purpose. #1 requirement in my book. Thanks for sharing.
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