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1/22/2011 5:36:33 PM
Timothy Leisman Posts: 1
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Just a little poem I wrote about modernity, I can't assign a style to it.. It just kind of flowed out of me when I wrote it, with hardly any thinking or editing... Contemplating the words has had incredibly meaningful effects on my life, and I hope it hits you in similar ways. Would love to hear any critique
Quintessential Contemporary
her eyes widened as her soul rushed back in i left the room with no comprehension as to her doom.
the paper scratched back as the pen scrawled with enough force to leave a real mark this time.
or excuse me, the typewriter keys play ticks and tocks in my ears over and over. no one writes with pencil anymore.
what we have done surely limits our understanding (just throw yourself with me into the digital sea)
with no boat in sight we are lost in the tide exactly how we should be: with no comprehension as to her doom.
time to self destruct some more
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