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5/11/2010 9:26:32 AM Karen Dominick Posts: 5	The day dawned like any other day time moving faster than I could and me still not caring if time stopped altogether I had no future, I only had yesterday The dust of broken dreams floating in empty space only served to remind me I had fallen from grace with worn out excuses of being so misunderstood. Then I found my long awaited answer It came from above and it came from within shocking me right back into the reality I had hidden an emotional cancer with my apathetic shield of armor called skin It was finally the hour to forgive my sin to let go of the past, learn to live again I no longer need to follow my shadow It can follow me if it can keep up the pace I have a crystal clear view from my window of my gratitude exploding in a splendid array at being given a new chance to win my own race I am at peace; for today is my independence day
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5/12/2010 1:15:06 PM Karen Dominick Posts: 5	Thank you Catie for your kind remarks! I was wondering if I had the poetry form correct as to describe the form of this poem as "Free Verse"? edited by kdominick on 5/12/2010
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