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9/24/2013 11:16:03 AM Alexander Schwartz Posts: 11	A fragile mind breaks Wake upon the rock laden shores A muffled heart begs to echo Whispers lost among a velvet chamber Dusk comes premature time and again Dropping the curtain on an optimistic sunrise If you never witness dawn There is no tomorrow Always the dreamer aches Never awake to make real what he desires The restless corpse walks blind Dead ends seem fitting for one of the kind Lost in the labyrinth of strangling vines Love is the motive and the weapon Taking root in throats dry from weeping Sprouts of amnesia in place of smiles A garden called heartbreak holds onlookers captive The comfort takes hold, sets in the bones weary of searching A plea for rest lands on deaf ears The hollow boy tires of himself The last request he will ever make "End me" Lost and tired He wishes to be weak no more -- AlexanderMichael<3
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9/25/2013 11:46:35 AM Just That Archaic Poet Posts: 89	Did you change your nom de plume? I really liked your "Words_Are_Weapons alias
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9/25/2013 12:03:43 PM Alexander Schwartz Posts: 11	Honestly Idk why it changed, I never touched it lol -- AlexanderMichael<3
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