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9/15/2013 10:41:23 AM

Teresa Lindsay
Posts: 16
The outside world changes thru the seasons
As we go thru the seasons of life ourselves
Spring is the time of birth and rebirth
To begin again new, fresh in life, always sweet
To grow as the season grows and changes
Summer is for the fun in life, our youth
To be young and care free, no worries
To be nourished with love and the elements
Fall a time of maturity and settling down
Full of knowledge, wisdom and hope
Living in contentment and harmony in life
Winter a time of aging and preparing
For the final journey in life, to give way
For the new spring of birth and rebirth.
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9/15/2013 12:06:52 PM

Just That Archaic Poet
Posts: 89
The only problem I have with this piece (and call me pedant), is that you spelled "through" as "thru"; that choice in spelling brings down the quality of an overall good poem, I think. Other than that, I enjoyed your piece; kudos
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