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8/16/2013 6:54:00 PM

scott thirtyseven
Posts: 13

Good morning world.

Damn you!
and your warm
sunray fingers
prying open my eyes.

Robbing me of my
nocturnal fantasies,
my semiconscious bliss.

Leaving the remnants
of my peace
and tranquillity
laying scattered across
my face and through
my hair.

Your rising light
shrinking the shadows
of my freedom.

I will not be seduced
by your clear blue promises.

For your pressing realities
already taste foul
in my mouth.

Leave me morning
to my diminishing serenity.

I have performed this poem and put it on you tube:

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