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7/8/2013 9:43:41 PM Gabe Shelly Posts: 95	Kill Kill Kill-- No hammer and anvil, no ax and chisel Just a shuffle of feet... back and forth, back and forth. Too tall for the ground, too green for its roots-- Just a wave of a wand and sweat on the brow, Spraying Fate here there and everywhere. No big job... Just a slow shuffle of feet... Back and forth, back and forth 6/27/'13 edited by Gabe on 7/9/2013
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7/9/2013 2:26:39 PM Alexander Schwartz Posts: 11	Gorgeous. A short poem that still paints a vivid picture. If I were wearing a hat I would give it a tip to you :p Maybe check out some of mine as well? I would appreciate some feedback, greatly. -- AlexanderMichael<3
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