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5/30/2013 8:40:48 PM Nato Calubiran Posts: 23	Across the borders, might be big or small Bright Galions, ready to destroy with big cannons Colonizing every country they go Dead bodies and blood to the seas they flow Every Filipino stand your ground For God is with us, in our hearts He's found God is with us, God is in me Hallelujah, We keep on singing Hallelujah, We might die today Hallelujah, Give us strength we pray In the end the battle is over Justice for our Country lovers Killings and Words to ponder Love of God, In his arms we're under My Dual entry. ABC Poem of Love (Love of Country, HAHAHAH!!!) Poems about Nationality
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6/1/2013 6:15:59 PM Reason A. Poteet Posts: 9	The only, only thing that bothers me with this is your note at the bottom, (Love of Country HAHAHAHA!!!) If you don't love your country, why bother. Not sure how to take this...it is not strongly sarcastic and I can't tell whether you are making fun of religion but I sense you might be?
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6/2/2013 11:13:44 PM Nato Calubiran Posts: 23	I really dont have much to say about religion so and so... I was trying to say that maybe for the ABC Love contest they are trying to get the love which is merely relative. human to human love and stuff like that... so i wrote a human to country love? am i right?
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