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1/26/2013 4:09:01 AM

Sharon Morken
Posts: 133
I hoped
I really really hoped
By now that you'd pick up the phone
Or show up at my door
But there's someone you want a littlebit more


Days and nights go by
Staying strong is hard but I try
Reminders pop up in every day life
But still I keep busy and strong, I try


So many moments I've never had
I'll never get to experience with dad
Basic anatomy connected us at first
You ignored all that and rolled me inthe dirt


Downhill I fell and fell and fell
You made me cry many times and I yelled
Your heads made of brick
My hearts made of sticks
Your abuse burned my love down
You hallowed the insides of this chick


Been ten years now, I've rolled back upthe hill
Been a struggle, but life now is prettychill
I wont pretend that I don't think ofyou
Miss having someone there because I do
Honestly I never did feel that youcared
That bottle always came first and itwas more than I could bare


Being me is something I learned to do
Something that wouldn't have happenedif I stuck with you.
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