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12/2/2012 11:20:11 PM Karlin K. Jensen Posts: 8	It was something beautiful, like a quickly budding rose. We found it among the thorns, struggling to reach the sunlight. We gave the flower so much care with soil and shade and gentleness. We watered the flower, so happily, almost too happily, too enthusiastic. We were a whirlwind, destructive despite all our best intentions. I think that the flower drowned. We just used too much water, and the flower quickly faded. We killed it. We, together, now have no purpose.
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12/17/2012 7:03:15 AM Nina Mindova Posts: 4	KarlinKJ wrote: It was something beautiful, like a quickly budding rose. We found it among the thorns, struggling to reach the sunlight. We gave the flower so much care with soil and shade and gentleness. We watered the flower, so happily, almost too happily, too enthusiastic. We were a whirlwind, destructive despite all our best intentions. I think that the flower drowned. We just used too much water, and the flower quickly faded. We killed it. We, together, now have no purpose.
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12/17/2012 7:04:06 AM Nina Mindova Posts: 4	hello.Nice to meet you. I'm poetess from Bulgaria.Sell canvases.
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12/21/2012 12:01:26 PM Caitlin Dwinnell Posts: 4	I like the poem! It was nice and told simple story, but held so much more underneath.
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