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10/15/2012 8:39:38 AM

Sharon Morken
Posts: 133
Home from another days work
Sometimes you can be such a jerk

Knock back one two or three,
Tell me what do you see

There goes a forth fifth sixth
I want nothing to do with this

Guitar is loud,
All I hear is your frown

Now you on the couch,
Guitar lays on your tummy sleepinggrouch

My turn I gotta try and sleep
You could never defend me
You'd too damn weak
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