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10/12/2012 11:31:16 AM
Shovna Singh
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Little girl with twinkling eyes,
Carries a smile so sweet so nice,
She hops and plays, dances and leaps,
But deep in her heart a burden heaps.
Little girl with innocent heart,
Carries a pain that tore her apart,
She knows no guilt, no shame, no fear,
her cries only the angels hear.
Little girl with a pure soul,
Carries an integrity that keeps her whole,
She faces the bullying, she faces the threat,
She accepts it as her mere fate.
Little girl with sealed lips,
wants maa-papa to know the secret she keeps,
She knows no white, she knows no black,
But she knows the beast that humanity lack.
The beast that abused her day and night,
The beast against whom she could never fight,
The beast who crossed the Satan's fence,
The beast who stole her innocence!
(*Harsh criticism would be appreciated) 
edited by Shovna on 10/12/2012
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10/14/2012 4:22:28 AM
Lynn Dolly
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I love the dark tone. I feel bad for this little girl (
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