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8/25/2012 8:20:52 PM

Rebecca Larkin
Posts: 1
False cheer shines through the glittery red ink,
Letter after colorful letter,
Hopes and dreams are drained down the sink,
Letter after colorful letter...

Dead inside is this empty life of lies,
Letter after colorful letter,
Woods are filled with broken cries
Letter after colorful letter...

'Tomorrow' will never come, hope will never shine,
Letter after colorful letter,
I will never be fine-
Letter after colorful letter...

A flutter of hope, sputters and dies
Letter after colorful letter.
The smiles of the gel-pen always lies
Letter after colorful letter.
edited by psychofreak on 8/25/2012
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8/28/2012 6:40:01 AM

Sharon Morken
Posts: 133
I dig..Very good write!
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