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8/5/2012 3:18:54 PM

Lynn Dolly
Posts: 133

Cant Control It

I wish I could control what you do,
What you do effects me,
I've done all I can do make thingsbetter,
You don't seem to care, makes my life atragedy,

I shop places I believe in,
Costco, Trader Joe's, Mom/Pop Shops,Etsy,
I might pay a little more,
They take good values a little moreseriously,

If I had a **** load of money,
I'd buy this world and hire Cannabisusers to run it.
Peace would spread everywhere,
Environment would be treated more fair,

All the CEO's, politicians, andscumbags of the world,
Would be locked up in a country sizestadium,
One by one they could take each otherout,
They'd set record for Websters largestpandemonium,

All the do-gooders could partytogether,
For everyone, the sunsets would fargreater,
Days would shine, music would blast,
Stupid political drama would be a thingof the past!
edited by svlynn18 on 8/5/2012

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