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Forum Home » High Critique » MY FIRST LOVE, 1st prize award African lv 4 all

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8/4/2012 3:54:11 AM

femi joey oloidi
Posts: 13
MY FIRST LOVE

1st prize award wining poem: African Love for all Awards


My first love
is a whore

but i want her back
because she always had my back

when everyone
threw me back, barked, nagged disappeared continuously on me

just because,
i try and cry to make them understand how i feel about them

My first love
is a whore

but i want her back
because the love apple, love bite, and her loving kindness,
makes me lovesick,
and unloved to other love birds, that promiscuously convey my way,
to convict my heart.

My first love
Is a whore

But I want her back
because she has not false me
but she has inherently taken me the way I am

So I am also readily convinced
to take her the way she is
into my love life

My first love
Is a whore

But I want her back
for I now known
that those whom I took as the goal keepers of my life 'my friends'

Imprisoned my affections for my first love,
overstretched my suspicion,
and tore my first love's glossy fondness, into unscrupulous odiousness

My first love
Is a whore

but I will become a fishmonger
Just to fishnet her back into my life,

because I truly want back my first love
even if she is going to come back without her love, but with her heart

that will serve
Just to see and be with her again
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8/6/2012 1:47:25 PM

Sharon Morken
Posts: 133
This is so honest and wonderful! Well done!
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8/17/2012 10:53:34 AM

femi joey oloidi
Posts: 13
thanks for your comment. made my day! *hugs n flowers*
kingfemi
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