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8/1/2012 8:50:54 AM

Sharon Morken
Posts: 133
Not Fair

When I Think it's done,

My emotions become undone,

I cried for hours for you,

You always fail to come through,

Not fair, I cry and cry

My love will never die,

Been 6 years for me.

You live 10 min from me,

Never bother to call,

Apologize for sorrow you installed,

Not fair, I cry and cry,

My love for you will never die,

Your the ass I cant shake,

Thought I'd get over you,

Huge mistake,

With every milestone.

Every happy moment,

there's a part of me,

your love would be my happy token

Not fair,I cry and cry,

My love for you will never die
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8/4/2012 12:40:24 AM

femi joey oloidi
Posts: 13
Nice and touching! I like, "your the ass,I can't shake" cool! Lol
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