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7/23/2012 7:13:45 PM

Sharon Morken
Posts: 133
It's been a year since youpassed,
We never met you but I still feelblessed,
You helped me through a very toughtime,
Retro melodies and lyrics put a mellowon my bind,

Found out about you two years ago,
Such a unique singer could work anyflow,
Took your own to create such aninfluential sound,
From something you were never able tofully rebound,
You never comprised, you were honestand cool,
That may not be what everyone says butit's true,
You spoke and sang from the heart,
You always did, even from the start,

Honesty, humility, humbleness andvulnerability,
These traits made it easy for you tolive your life publicly,
You set the bar for what many musiciansstrive to achieve,
You pulled it off with such ease,
the stars aligned, it was meant to be,
It takes guts and strength to be yourown,
That's why you wear this generationsJazz thrown.
edited by svlynn18 on 7/23/2012
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7/26/2012 7:07:34 PM

wow this is very deep and heartfelt....I liked it alot. although the beginning line was kind of strong and offputting and kinda dampens the whole mood of the poem, whether it was intentionally or not it jus placed me in a really dark place.
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8/5/2012 2:31:28 PM

Sharon Morken
Posts: 133
I can see that now...guess I was feeling dark when I wrote it. Thanks for the feedback!)
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