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7/18/2012 6:18:54 PM

Sharon Morken
Posts: 133
I fought for years to keep your heart,
Should've been no battle,
rightfully mine from the start,
Ignored everything else,
felt so stupid and stressed,
to learn that you'd later squash theheart in my chest,

My last look in your eyes,
savaged my insides,
It's all come to this,
Our final words with no kiss,
No hugs and no sign of remorse,
It's obvious things have taken theircourse,

If not your way, then bye, don’t givea **** what I do,
Waste of my time trying to talk to you,
It's like trying to knock down a brickwall,
Your love was never intended for thelong haul

Was foolish thinking your abusive dayswere over,
Guess that's impossible when your anasshole undercover,
Only certainty is that you'll neverchange,
Life without you is my only chance tobe sane,

Too mad to talk I left you there,
The sane voice made my choice instantlyclear,
All my efforts have been exceeded,
Wars over, this is the closure I needed
Tears run down my face and I feel rage,
Like fine wine, my happiness will growwith age.

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