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7/7/2012 6:15:09 PM

David Warner
Posts: 1
Please comment let me know if this is absolute rubbish or what:

Amanda Amanda, you have stolen our hearts
Amanda Amanda, cannot be apart
Sweetness and light, a beautiful sight
Amanda Amanda, what a delight

When wedding bells ring our hearts they will sing
For happiness and joy and every special thing

Together through distance and time, love will remain uncomplicated and fine
A new life and vibrant cultures explored, you shall always be adored

Amanda Amanda you have stolen our hearts
Amanda Amanda, you cannot be apart
With you a shared life oh what a delight
Amanda Amanda a beautiful sight.
edited by davidwarner on 7/8/2012
edited by davidwarner on 7/8/2012
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