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Poems to keep you awake at night

Blog Posted:6/10/2013 5:47:00 PM
Poems to keep you awake at night 
Contest Judged:  6/10/2013 12:00:00 AM
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Sponsored by: Roy Jerden
Contest Winner Medal1Double SolitaireCarrie Richards
Contest Winner Medal2CorneredDebbie Guzzi
Contest Winner Medal2PollyKurt Everdeen
Contest Winner Medal3Night ImageJeremy Aguire
Contest Winner Medal3Daddy Don't Do It AgainBrick Cullum
Contest Winner Medal3An Appointment With Death On The 44th FloorGary Wayne Hill
Contest Winner Medal3I Fear The Dreams - - -Constance La France
Contest Winner Medal3Where Shadows Refuse to Dancebinibining P.iNk
Contest Winner Medal3in the meadowBlack Eyed Susan
Contest Winner Medal3SnoringRick Zablocki
Contest Winner Medal3DisturbingBecca Lucas
Contest Winner Medal3We Didn't ListenMandy Tams The Golden Girl
Honorable MentionKitty Came CallingRichard Lamoureux
Honorable MentionSuccubusTim Ryerson
Honorable MentionThe beast of Hidden MoonSeosamh De Burca
Honorable MentionGive me some moreStucz Arnold
Honorable MentionCome Out and PlayNato Calubiran
Honorable MentionThe Stranger in the HouseTimothy Hicks
Honorable MentionThe TempestJonathan Bellmann
Honorable MentionWaters EdgeBrett Chase
Honorable MentionHard CrossingBlind Pathos
Honorable MentionScary Situationjack horne
Honorable MentionFear The NightCaryl Muzzey
Honorable MentionTURNING WENDIGOCyndi MacMillan

Well, we have the usual gang of suspects, but some new faces as well. The topic was a difficult one to write to without falling into cliches. I was concerned that a few poems might fall out of PS guidelines, so I re-read them. Apparently explicit language is out, but pedophilia is OK. Hateful expressions are out, but slicing people up, nailing them to the wall, and forcibly drowning/suffocating them are in (as long as you are polite about it, of course). I found it interesting that so many people jumped on this topic, but ignored the chance to write some lyrics to beautiful music in Craig's contest, started at the same time. The Dark Side of the Force definitely rules.

I'm not going to speak to every poem, but I did want to mention a few.
Carrie and Debbie's talent speaks for itself and does not require any comments, just a read. BTY, Debbie's is a Villanelle, too, a tough form in itself. I had no idea these two sweet ladies harbored such ideas. 

The most disturbing poem was Brick Cullum's for me. This is one I would like to truly forget, all joking aside, as it implies that pedophilia is an enjoyable experience for the victim. I was wondering if someone would take the topic (there were two actually) from the POV of the victim, but this one really bothered me.

I was going to exclude all the explicit slasher poems as I wanted to focus on the psychological side of fear, but Kurt Everdeen's poem was so creative and created such disturbing images that I decided to make an exception.

Becca's poem has already been discussed in a blog ad nauseum, so I just wanted to say that she took on a tough topic and did a good job, creating more than a cardboard character that we could just forget. However, she did imply a direct cause and effect relationship between pornography work and suicide, at least in this case. I don't think it's ever that simple, so I don't think any general conclusions should be made, although I'm neither a suicide nor porn expert.

On the HM poems, I wanted to recognize a couple of folks who took a humorous approach, Seosamh  and Jack Horne. I like it when folks turn the theme kind of upside down.

Jonathan Bellman's poem is not particularly scary, more foreboding than anything else, but it's such good poetry I wanted to recognize it anyway. Same for Blind Pathos, who has great meter also.

Last is Cyndi's poem ... or rather poem and exhortation. There is so much emotion expressed here that I felt it needed recognition. Plus, I'm a bit afraid of Cyndi....
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Date: 6/12/2013 2:44:00 PM
Congrats to your winners, and if you could tell me what you didn't like in mine, I would be interested in knowing. soupmail in case I miss it here.
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Date: 6/11/2013 12:12:00 AM
Thanks for my place Roy xx
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Date: 6/10/2013 7:30:00 PM
Atleast I made it to honorable mention. Yey!
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Date: 6/10/2013 7:10:00 PM
First, you nailed the first place. Carrie's work blew me away ... as did Debbie's. High placement was VERY deserved... great judging! I will have to read the others soon. Your contest idea was a challenge, which I think is why so many wanted to tackle it. Dark contests don't happen here often. Good on you for diving into a subject that may have truly brought out more gruesome details. Now, you want scary? You should try my coffee. Proof my hubby loves me. LOL... and I lose my filter when I think a friend may get hurt... makes me look like a mother grizzly in the spring. What is scary? I'm actually improving (lol. Ask Debbie, Catie, Nette and Ruben) Thanks for the HM. Really I was surprised, genuinely surprised, that I did place... I was aware of the shift between free verse and prose... I just COULDN'T bring myself to use a device in certain areas of this particular work. It felt ... disrespectful? hmmm... even cold. It was close to the hardest thing I've ever written. Again, thanks for the inspiration and my placement. Your cheque is in the mail... ha! ;-) PS- I am always grateful for inspiration. Wins are nice, but its the creative energy I most enjoy. Never hesitate to give me an F, Fly-boy ;-) I'll thank you all the same
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Date: 6/10/2013 6:54:00 PM
First of all....a big thanks Roy, I'm surprised to see my poem placed so high, considering that I abhor horror movies!! However, the disturbed part of me loves Hitchcock movies...even old re-runs of his old black and white tv show....as well as Twilight Zone..so there came the muse for my poem. (I thought what would Hitchcock do here?......not showing the dead wife until the end) Thank you (I think?)......for the challenge....I may take a pill tonight for sleeping after reading some of your entries!! Yikes!! Mine was rather tame in comparison!! LOL !!
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Date: 6/10/2013 6:32:00 PM
LOL no need to fear my Dee [Cyndi] she would only hurt to defend those in need of her help, she's a lady with white knight syndrome [as am I!] So sorry I just couldn't keep reading the entries I'd like to be able to sleep some time in the near future and I did read Kurt's [shiver] I needed a physic cleansing after that one! I can't watch those types of movies either! They did do the face 'smile' thing on the Vikings. YOU had a hard job.
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