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Read Poems by Ruben O.

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Tower -- Concrete Haiku

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                     * .           *         .       * .
           *   .          *   .             *        *      *.
      *               *          *      *.       *  .       .         *.
              *         *    .   *     *    * 
       *.  .         *                            *.     *.        .*
 *   *.         *             .*                  .*       *           *
             . *      .     *         .  *       .        .   *
                         *      *             *. .       *
      *             .  *        *     .           *        *.       *
  .*                                                   .*     *
                                *

                               *
 


     Thou shalt not
     ||——\     /——\     /——\     /——||
     ||       |    |         |    |         |    |       ||
   /         \__/        \__/        \__/        \
    \                                                    /        
      \                                                /                           
        \                                           /
          ||                                      ||
          ||                                      ||
          ||                                      ||                   
          ||        t __a___m__e       ||                    
          ||        |__+_____+__|       ||                  
          ||                                      ||                        
          ||                                      ||                       
          ||                                      ||      
          ||                                      ||                   
          ||
          ||
          ||                        dragons
          ||
          ||
          ||
          ||



Syllables count: 1/2/1/2/1/2/1/2
Second attempt at Concrete Haiku

Copyright © Ruben O. | Year Posted 2017

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  1. Date: 5/23/2017 12:50:00 PM

    I blame flagons. Admittedly, I'm miffed.
  1. Date: 5/23/2017 12:03:00 PM

    Oh, this is so great. What five words can do!!
  1. Date: 5/22/2017 6:19:00 AM

    Ouch, I'll rember to refrain this activity mine dear poet!.....Hello my dear friend, I've certainly missed your writes! Peace be with you Ruben...Have a blessed day...Much love, james
  1. Date: 5/19/2017 4:34:00 PM

    Oh, wonderful :) I love them ~*
  1. Date: 5/17/2017 1:43:00 PM

    I'm looking for new concrete postings on the "New Poems" list. Didn't see any, so, I'll 're-read' the already existing concrete poems lol. I did see a poem that seems to be part dedication to concrete poems/writers, posted by an alt-account; the person is too cowardly to express its ( <-----) thoughts under main account. The person's entire muse appears to be fueled by thoughts about poetry soupers ha ha! https://www.poetrysoup.com/poems_poets/poems_by_poet_read.aspx?ID=85959-----take a guess at who it is :D
  1. Date: 5/17/2017 12:58:00 PM

    I see that you've added some fireworks (still haven't fixed the wobbly stones, though). Are the fireworks being launched for a specific celebration?
  1. Date: 5/15/2017 1:08:00 PM

    From the GBJW: "Thou shalt not wonk thine conker." ---- If it's supposed to be a reflection, shouldn't the tower be depicted more petite? But, then the tower's line of sight wouldn't offer much watchfulness. In progress, eh. You should fix parts of the turrets and right wall (my right, their left). As it stands now, a catapult could take down that tower quite easily.
  1. Date: 5/15/2017 9:29:00 AM

    SEEK.. dragon, Chum. Thou shalt not SEEK dragons... so much to say. Amazing what you can find out when you start to research a topic. Did you know that you are a goat? Yup. You're a goat, a worldly goat and Soup? Soup is worldly, too, an influence to be avoided and some may be deemed "weak" if they compete, try for Soup contests which would be "prideful." Still, your Concrete haiku has a subtle empathy which this comment should have more of-- but ALL the things I learned??? Ho boy!

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