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Your boy plays by the garden gates, searching the ground for fallen dates. And a desert wind sways palm trees, whistling with every feisty breeze. Pointing to a jet in the sky, he's mesmerized as death streaks by. And as you snatch him up to run, the earth erupts bright as the sun. A siren warns of an attack, the air explodes, and all turns black. And you wake from a numbing sleep, racked by pain, and begin to weep. Opening your eyes, the sky's gone, total darkness erased the dawn. And your ears ring painfully loud, buried under a smoking shroud. Reaching out, you encounter death, your child is without pulse or breath. And a piercing pain stabs your soul, your son lies dead here in this hole. Air and sound rush in together but all you smell is burnt leather. For in Syria, hope can't rise, what is life when your whole world dies? (Rhyme) 5/18/2017

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Date: 3/14/2018 1:28:00 PM
A most beautiful and compassionate poem, Emile. Well done.
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Date: 3/14/2018 1:41:00 PM
Thanks Line, your comments and support are much appreciated, Emile.
Date: 5/30/2017 5:43:00 PM
Congrats on your win Emile , This is such a great write I can feel all the pain see all the horrors of war.. I love this poem a 7 in my eyes :)
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Date: 5/30/2017 5:52:00 PM
Thanks Glen, your comments and support are much appreciated, Emile.
Date: 5/30/2017 7:53:00 AM
A deep piece indeed.... Congrats Emile, for placing 3rd with this piece!!! ;-)
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Date: 5/30/2017 9:17:00 AM
Thanks Teddy, your comments are always eagerly sought and most welcome my friend, Emile.
Date: 5/29/2017 12:58:00 PM
Very heartfelt write, Emile, the picture you've paint so vivid. Congratulations on your win ~*
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Date: 5/29/2017 2:07:00 PM
Thanks Eve, your comments are always eagerly sought and most welcome my friend, Emile.
Date: 5/29/2017 5:09:00 AM
This poem of yours was my favourite in the contest. And I am glad to see you on the winners list.
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Date: 5/29/2017 9:12:00 AM
Thanks Darren, your comments are always eagerly sought and most welcome my friend, Emile.
Date: 5/24/2017 1:47:00 AM
Brought tears to my eyes, Emile, extremely sad, but very skilfully written:) a 7:)
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Date: 5/24/2017 9:38:00 AM
Thanks Niall, your comments and your support are welcome, Emile.
Date: 5/19/2017 11:18:00 AM
Hi Emile , War will never be good for anyone , your write is so powerful and emotional a very sad thank you for sharing :)
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Date: 5/19/2017 12:48:00 PM
Thanks Niall, your comments and your support are welcome, Emile.
Date: 5/19/2017 7:32:00 AM
Emile, I think the whole world is crazy, I really do. I have seen so much madness in my life, but this beats all..... My parents were exiles from Egypt, they have seen their fair share of violence and civil war. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 5/19/2017 11:02:00 AM
Thanks Darren, I find myself agreeing with you...the world is a crazy place, and the patients are in charge of the asylum, Emile.
Date: 5/19/2017 6:21:00 AM
Wow, Emile! This is SO powerful. Very well written. It brings the reader right into the situation and hits the heart directly. So sad. Goosebumps reading this one.
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Date: 5/19/2017 10:57:00 AM
Thanks Heidi, your comments are always eagerly sought and most welcome my friend, Emile.
Date: 5/19/2017 4:12:00 AM
- A picture of our real world in pain, Emile - Great written as always - Best wishes in the contest - I have posted: - Psychedelic Whistle Plays a Rhythm Into the Darkness - today (a co-write) .... a little long write, but worth reading :) - Happy weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 5/19/2017 10:56:00 AM
Thanks Sunshine, your comments are always eagerly sought and most welcome my friend I will check out your poem, Emile.

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