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Your Absence

Along the edge of a thought when I awaken, or In memories, the moment I realize there are no more Together since birth... separated by death All that remains is a fragment of life... Unaffected by your absence. ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++ Written 2-25-2016 For 'Fragment of Life' Contest sponsored by Broken Wing Fourth Place For 'CONTEST NO 420, ANY FORM OR NONE, ANY THEME, UP TO A MAX OF 20 LINES' Sponsored by Brian Strand Fifth Place

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Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 4/16/2018 12:56:00 AM

Congrats on your win, Susan! :-) <3

Susan Gentry
Date: 4/16/2018 2:59:00 PM

Thank you!

Sandra Haight

Date: 4/14/2018 1:45:00 PM

A lovely verse, Susan...says so much in just five lines. Congratulations on your placement on this short list of winners. Hugs, Sandra

Susan Gentry
Date: 4/14/2018 5:17:00 PM

Thx Sandra! Appreciate you.

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 4/9/2018 11:35:00 PM

Woah that's potent. Congratulations on your win. Hugs

Susan Gentry
Date: 4/10/2018 11:44:00 PM

Thank you Maureen!

Line Gauthier

Date: 4/8/2018 7:57:00 AM

Beautiful verse, Maureen. Commands a pause for reflection. The row of crosses is a striking visual addition. Superbly done, congrats on your most deserved win.

Susan Gentry
Date: 4/9/2018 9:56:00 PM

Thank you! :) It's Susan. I've done the same thing a time or two. I appreciate you commenting and reading. You're so kind.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/15/2016 11:01:00 AM

Susan, Congrats on your "Fragment Of Life" win. Luv ~LINDA~

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 3/8/2016 10:35:00 PM

Delightful poetry Susan.. congrats on big win!

Probir Gupta

Date: 3/8/2016 8:30:00 AM

Gems of sad moments. Very good...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/28/2016 6:27:00 PM

It's a sad reflection on life. This could be a parent or a twin perhaps? I really like what you did for this challenge.

Susan Gentry
Date: 3/2/2016 5:14:00 PM

Yes, it is. Thank you Andrea. Appreciate you.

Rohaan Suresh

Date: 2/28/2016 10:17:00 AM

Great...I felt...it to my core...Awesome!!!

Susan Gentry
Date: 3/2/2016 5:13:00 PM

Oh my, thank you! :)

Anthony Mark

Date: 2/28/2016 1:42:00 AM

such a strong personal write, flows great, and that centre line carries such melancholic gravity, completely blown away with this piece, , ... knew you had it in you, very well done Susan,

Susan Gentry
Date: 3/2/2016 5:08:00 PM

Ahhh ty so much! You helped make it happen... Your comment brightened the day. :)

Aiyah Torres

Date: 2/26/2016 8:18:00 AM

Very creative write ,Susan.. :O) It breaks my heart to know someone's lost their dearest one.. :'(

Susan Gentry
Date: 2/27/2016 12:20:00 AM

Why thank you Alyah! I appreciate your sympathy... No one is immune from loss... Take care, :)

Jan Allison

Date: 2/26/2016 4:09:00 AM

heartbreaking piece Susan - brought a lump to my throat - I think this will do well for you in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx7

Susan Gentry
Date: 2/27/2016 12:17:00 AM

Ahhh thank you Jan! I appreciate this and you sharing your reaction. Hugs...

Nette Onclaud

Date: 2/26/2016 12:00:00 AM

beautiful heart breaker of a piece, dear susan... well done!..huggs

Susan Gentry
Date: 2/27/2016 12:16:00 AM

Thanks so much nette! Hugs back to ya...

Daniel Turner

Date: 2/25/2016 11:13:00 PM

This is very sad, Susan. It is still a great write. Good luck in the contest. Peace:)

Susan Gentry
Date: 2/27/2016 12:16:00 AM

Thank you so much! Sad situation... Same to you :)