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Yesterday you were my Garden

I sit in your garden alone Alone, thinking of yesterday Yesterday the sun was shining Shining on our perfect moment For Nette's four line contest. Being it was four lines I thought I would choose Visual 4.

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Date: 6/16/2015 8:28:00 AM
Beautiful. You have captured so much in so few words. Well done.
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Date: 6/16/2015 7:53:00 AM
Richard, this line poem is a beautiful 10 and thanks for visiting my poem, Beware
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Date: 6/14/2015 7:00:00 PM
Nice Richard... Enjoyed... Verlena
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Date: 6/13/2015 5:40:00 PM
Four lines that hook the reader's imagination . . . how often I have wondered about yesterday! Nicely done Richard. 7
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/13/2015 6:14:00 PM
Thanks so much David.
Date: 6/12/2015 10:02:00 PM
Loved this, I do confess I am bursting at the seams to go on, as this could lead one in so many directions!!!!! :) ( OK I had black forest cake too, so not comments on bursting at the seams)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/13/2015 8:43:00 AM
You make me smile buddy!
Date: 6/11/2015 11:18:00 PM
This is perfect Richard! I really love the romance of a past perfect moment. This is going into my fave's Richard. GL in the contest. I hope to see this rate high! 7
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/12/2015 8:10:00 AM
Thanks for your kind assessment of this piece. Check out my group poem, I would be happy if you took part Connie.
Date: 6/11/2015 5:39:00 PM
Very nicely penned.....good luck in the contest
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Date: 6/11/2015 3:51:00 PM
These 4 lines convey so much! Beautiful write Rick. Hugs
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Date: 6/11/2015 10:31:00 AM
Good luck in the contest, Richard... I liked how I was time-transported.
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Date: 6/10/2015 4:21:00 PM
Richard, and it is four beautiful lines 7 and thanks for visiting my poem, apply within
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/10/2015 5:58:00 PM
Thanks Constance. I also appreciate your title for my joint poem but I need you to write a line that goes with it and connects it to the poem.
Date: 6/10/2015 11:33:00 AM
Oh how time changes in an hour or a moment. You captured that perfectly.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/10/2015 5:59:00 PM
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Date: 6/9/2015 3:34:00 PM
Beautiful, good luck in the contest.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/9/2015 6:48:00 PM
Thanks M.L.
Date: 6/9/2015 1:11:00 AM
Oh so much transmitted in just four lines..Yesterday had come and gone ,like She that blossomed fragrantly..Awesome Rimchard.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/9/2015 8:39:00 AM
Thanks Charmaine.;o)
Date: 6/8/2015 7:01:00 PM
nice poem Rick gl in contest hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/8/2015 7:44:00 PM
Thanks Shadow, can always use a bit of luck.
Date: 6/8/2015 3:31:00 PM
so simple but so beautifully nostalgic! I really like it, Richard.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/8/2015 5:37:00 PM
Thanks Andrea, hugs Rick.
Date: 6/8/2015 2:42:00 PM
Lovely words, Richard. This has a wistful quality to it.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/8/2015 5:37:00 PM
Thanks Laura.:0)
Date: 6/8/2015 11:29:00 AM
This could be used as a very lovely example on a lesson about the importance of choosing the proper title. I LOVED the title....the rest is also enchanting. Good luck in the contest, Rick.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/8/2015 2:56:00 PM
The title was inspired by Leo Bascalia, the Love Doctor. His quote " A single rose can be my garden, a single person my world!"
Date: 6/8/2015 10:20:00 AM
Thank you Rick for the previous visit in my page. I was captivated by the title. The way you entitled your poem and the way you begin your first line was so profound. Feel glad to read this piece in my dark cubical room :). Good luck for the contest, and wishing you a great day Rick, hug, yanny
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/8/2015 10:47:00 AM
Thanks Yanny, with you in the cubicle it is surely filled with light.
Date: 6/8/2015 9:10:00 AM
Lovely. We chose the same visual, Rick. Seems it also had the same effect on you, going down memory lane. Btw, the form should be Free Verse per contest rules. :-)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/8/2015 9:48:00 AM
Thanks, I will change it.