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Winds of Change

tireless pendulum swings from left to right, and then from right to left as time goes by, the hand of fate churns the change out of sight, moments sail past across zodiac sky! trees score seasons within bark with growth rings, nights change, moon embarks on its wobbly trail, twittering birds seek hides fluttering wings, moist eyes lament their dead to no avail! hearts beat on with new hopes of better days, mother cuddles new born to sacred chest, rivers gush, waters searching easy ways, countless petals open at springs behest! fresh winds blow past with whiffs of memory, loose feather, dried leaf, lover’s lost letter, ink pen that trailed off in dad’s diary, an empty bed, on it, his blue sweater! hear it strike, pendulum clock on hallway, has watched me from baby locks to hairs grey! 2nd placement Written 28/11/2020 John Hamilton Winds of Change sonnet contest 10 syllables per line ABAB CDCD EFEF GHGH II breaking the 14 line rule! this has 18 lines.

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Date: 12/2/2020 3:49:00 PM
Congratulations, Krish, on your win. This is a brilliant sonnet with a deeply crafted metaphor. Best wishes ~ Mala
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Date: 12/3/2020 11:19:00 AM
Mala thank you! Glad it was placed a slightly longer length!!
Date: 11/30/2020 8:59:00 AM
Hi Krish. :) Love the metaphor - brilliant! Congratulations on the win! Linda
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Date: 11/30/2020 11:55:00 AM
Linda thank you! Pleased you like my poetry! so happy to receive your feedback!:) Thank you!
Date: 11/30/2020 7:35:00 AM
This is so well done Krishji... The pendulum metaphor and the concluding lines too good. Have a great day ~ Ani :)
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Date: 11/30/2020 11:52:00 AM
Thanks Ani! Happy to hear from you and glad you like!! Best wishes to you!! Krish
Date: 11/29/2020 12:50:00 PM
Love your pendulum metaphor, Krish! It is so vivid. I can hear it tick. And I love the last line of the concluding couplet that really illustrates the passage of time so poetically. Really well done! Congratulations.
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Krish Radhakrishna
Date: 11/29/2020 2:00:00 PM
Sam, thanks so much! Lovely to get such a positive feedback! God bless and take care! My warmest regards
Date: 11/29/2020 12:58:00 AM
Congratulations Krish, a worthy win, beautiful sonnet... Belle
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Date: 11/29/2020 1:19:00 AM
Thanks Belle! Pleased you like it!:)
Date: 11/28/2020 9:54:00 PM
Hi Krish, Congratulations on your winning write:-) Alexis
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Date: 11/28/2020 11:45:00 PM
Thanks Alexis! Pleased with your words of appreciation!
Date: 11/28/2020 7:28:00 PM
An interesting take on the sonnet, had some curious entries in regards to length, but enjoyed the read. congrats on your win!
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Krish Radhakrishna
Date: 11/28/2020 11:44:00 PM
Thanks John! cutting it down to 14 was not possible and therefore stayed with 18. Thank you for another excellent contest!!
Date: 11/28/2020 3:39:00 PM
Tick tock, it knows us from birth to dying day, you have penned a brilliant composition dear Krish, winning wishes are being sent your way .
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Krish Radhakrishna
Date: 11/28/2020 11:43:00 PM
Thanks my dear! delighted to hear from you! Happy you like it!
Date: 11/28/2020 1:28:00 PM
Fantastic sonnet, Krish. Best wishes in the contest. Thank you also for your recent visits and kind words. Hope all is well. Charlie
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Krish Radhakrishna
Date: 11/28/2020 1:39:00 PM
Charlie, thank you! happy to have you back churning out your wonderful poems! I am well and hope you are too!

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