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When the Honeymoon's Over

It wasn’t long ago we were perfect. We had our labels, and what was inside us was enjoyed by the people who chose us. It’s like the couple inside the car we are attached to. Their “labels” make them appear delicious! She – the sweet wife; he – the doting husband. But once their labels are stripped away, they’ll use up each other’s goodness. Years, like these roads we’re dragged on, will bang away at them. It won’t be long that they will be just as we are - dented cans. 1/8/18 for the Dented Cans Contest of John Lawless

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Line Gauthier

Date: 4/19/2018 10:31:00 PM

Back with much deserved congrats, Andrea. Awesome poem.

Abosede Ogundare

Date: 1/26/2018 3:58:00 AM

It's so lovely to be here again to read your beautiful poems. I have really missed your great writes. This is as beautiful as always. congratulations!

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 1/14/2018 8:27:00 AM

Lovely ink my friend. Congratulations on your fine placement! xomo :)

Jan Allison

Date: 1/13/2018 4:41:00 PM

Very well crafted Andrea congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

David Mohn

Date: 1/13/2018 3:20:00 PM

you did a great job with this tricky form Andrea...congratulations

John Lawless

Date: 1/13/2018 12:17:00 PM

....a double bladed - double Etheree so smoothly done Andrea...the inverted triangles of joy and despair. Thanks for participating in the contest.

Caycay Jennings

Date: 1/13/2018 4:14:00 AM

Good take, an original from all (not that many) that I've read. I love how you produce ideas from a such a creative and generous supply. Touching, too, with a dull truth none wish to know. Good luck in all things, including the contest (so many sit in wait of placement!) Love ... CayCay

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/12/2018 1:32:00 PM

Sad that life can dent us but that does build character..Enjoyed reading your work..Sara

Elaine George

Date: 1/12/2018 7:37:00 AM

The ending is a real doozy!!

John Michaels

Date: 1/12/2018 5:31:00 AM

Wonderfully metaphorical write, Andrea!! If dented cans are cared for and displayed lovingly, they can make great talking pieces... but, for those of us where that's no longer the case, we need to have faith that they can be recycled and turned into something fresh and new (my turn to get metaphorical)! All the best, John.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/11/2018 10:41:00 PM

A wonderful metaphor you used for an example Andrea. A great entry! : )

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/11/2018 9:47:00 AM

WOW, I'm not surprised, how everything ends up, stripped at the end... I know you will do well in this contest. Always ~LINDA~

Eve Roper

Date: 1/10/2018 9:24:00 PM

Nicely done :-) I wasn't sure what to write ,luck in the contest.

Kudzai Mhangwa

Date: 1/9/2018 10:38:00 PM

Interesting take on the dented can contest! You never cease to amaze Andrea! All the best in the contest

Akkina Downing

Date: 1/9/2018 8:06:00 PM

This is one cool piece, Drea :) made me smile, I sure did enjoy it! Good luck in the contest dear... hugs and smiles :)

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 1/9/2018 8:06:00 PM

Dented cans....wow...Andrea, it's been awhile since I've visited your page. You're writing as good as ever. "what was inside us was enjoyed by the people who chose us" Immensely deep metaphor. I need to come around more often. "once their labels are stripped away, they’ll use up each other’s goodness." Thats a great moment too...Good stuff! Always, Laura

Joseph May

Date: 1/9/2018 4:11:00 PM

Very well crafted Andrea...winning wishes

Joanna Daniel

Date: 1/9/2018 8:55:00 AM

Wonderful take on the theme given, Andrea:)

James Horn

Date: 1/9/2018 6:53:00 AM

With our sins world had dented, And so we finally had repented; World would storm, With her new form; Both Christ and God consented.

Maria Williams

Date: 1/9/2018 1:16:00 AM

I must admit I haven't seen this form before Andrea, but you excel in any form.Very creative your words in the form. I love your take on it. Good luck in the contest.....Maria

Matthew Anish

Date: 1/8/2018 10:07:00 PM

Very clever - nice use of shape! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Line Gauthier

Date: 1/8/2018 9:06:00 PM

Great surprising twist. Well done, Andrea.

Rhoda Tripp

Date: 1/8/2018 7:44:00 PM

Much truth here, sadly. Great interpretation of a dented can. Love the shape as well. Awesomeness

Ilene Bauer

Date: 1/8/2018 4:11:00 PM

such a creative take on the theme, andrea! sounds like a winning entry to me...

Judith S

Date: 1/8/2018 4:03:00 PM

This is just awesome Andrea!!!! Seems like a very difficult format to write in ... and yet you do it so very well!! Best of luck in the contest!!! ~Judy