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Unwanted Violent Visitors

Ready to rest is everyone, even the sun the day’s stress in fire, on the verge to burn. The home’s tranquility, disappears in rapture as masked ones storm a perceived greener pasture. Hands with weapons, point in threats forcing the already pressed mind to pour out sweat. Raised voices turn the arena to a mini war spilling out commands and questions, more and more. Subsequent confusion dispense from a trembling spouse as the fear hits hard on the nearby mouse. Instructions to forcefully donate an undeserved seed with the justification of being more in need. Everyone in total surrender, no need for self esteem even in the absolute obedience, hotter is the steam. Releasing ones sweat, bitter is this bile to the coveted, gun warns the body through the aisle. Violence in all corners wearing a diamond ring death carefully watch hoping to soon sing. Giving in to their demands is bravery, written in pencil avoiding fatal consequences needs no wise council. The relief from their exodus goes deep everyone is unharmed and safe, though gone is the sleep.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 8/6/2016 11:25:00 AM
I love the couplet format and the hard rhyme scheme. Ver quick pace that matches the content of the poem. Well Done!
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Funom Makama
Date: 8/6/2016 12:21:00 PM
Thank you so much Toni Orban
Date: 5/27/2016 7:46:00 PM
The power hungry and the horribles.:( No fairness nor compassion for those peace deserving innocents. A strong write written without malice or conceit, allowing one a view of what's happening. Well done Funom! Best wishes, Mikki
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Funom Makama
Date: 5/30/2016 9:32:00 AM
Thank you very much Michelle. You are far too kind
Date: 5/27/2016 1:09:00 PM
Enjoyed reading your well thought out work..I hope that only a work and not something that you or your loved ones has had to live through..Thanks for the visits to my page.Sara
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Funom Makama
Date: 5/30/2016 9:32:00 AM
Thank you very much Sara
Date: 5/27/2016 11:04:00 AM
This sounds like it could be Isis, but could be any number of happenings in our inner cities here in America. Good work. Love, daver
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Funom Makama
Date: 5/30/2016 9:31:00 AM
Thank you very much Daver
Date: 5/27/2016 10:31:00 AM
You vividly describe this ugly incident, Funom. When intruders carry arms it is best to use common sense and not try to act the hero. ~ Regards // paul
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Funom Makama
Date: 5/30/2016 9:31:00 AM
Thank you very much Paul
Date: 5/26/2016 7:48:00 PM
wow, great write, confronting.
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Funom Makama
Date: 5/30/2016 9:29:00 AM
Thank you very much Lewis
Date: 5/26/2016 5:02:00 PM
So much of what happens in life is just the result of an accident of birth. At least in America if we don't like the situation where we are we can leave very easily! My heart goes out to you your skills are improving by leaps and bounds. Light & Love
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Funom Makama
Date: 5/30/2016 9:28:00 AM
You are so right Debbie. Thank you very much
Date: 5/26/2016 4:12:00 PM
Very much deep writing Funom, we want peace and progress but the situation is alarming,tearful and scary. You have picturised as if film.
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Funom Makama
Date: 5/30/2016 9:28:00 AM
Thank you very much Deepak
Date: 5/26/2016 2:09:00 PM
- When the night comes no one should feeling fear or be afraid - I think we all need to dream of a different world sometimes - A great poem, Funom - Happy weekend :) ! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Funom Makama
Date: 5/30/2016 9:27:00 AM
Thank you very much Sunshine
Date: 5/26/2016 2:03:00 PM
Riveted!!!! I read this frozen!!! The last two lines bring some relief but everything leading up the them is "terror" felt! God Bless you and yours who experienced this!
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Funom Makama
Date: 5/30/2016 9:26:00 AM
Thank you very much Walter

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