Untold

From swaying branches, russet leaves are swept fluttering like butterflies, descending For their demise and for lost love, I wept in sorrow, I admit ours is ending No use in denying or pretending The causes are vague and remain untold Vows will be broken, 'to have and to hold' Teardrops will flow when I whisper "goodbye" Grief makes me shiver; my hands, icy cold A gathering of clouds darkens the sky August 7th, 2020 Pick-A-Title Vol 21 - Dizain Contest Title Chosen: Untold Sponsor: Edward Ibeh

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John Watt

Date: 8/20/2020 3:47:00 PM

Grief makes me shiver too. This is such a well written poem of separation and the attendant sadness. I agree with Jan, first class. Congrats on your number 1!

Jenna Logan
Date: 8/21/2020 6:32:00 AM

Thank you an awful lot for your kindness, John. It's sincerely appreciated.

Jan Allison

Date: 8/20/2020 11:17:00 AM

excellent ink jenna, you are a first class poet and it shows in every poem you post:-) many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx

Jenna Logan
Date: 8/21/2020 6:32:00 AM

aww thank you so much, Jan. You are a combination of so many wonderful things. I see that in your poetry, too.

Mark Koplin

Date: 8/19/2020 6:01:00 PM

Wonderfully written Jenna! Congratulations on your top win!!

Jenna Logan
Date: 8/20/2020 4:28:00 AM

Thank you, Mark. You're so supportive.

Edward Ibeh

Date: 8/19/2020 4:59:00 PM

Heartiest congratulations for your top win in my contest with this magnificent poem, Jenna:-) You're such a gifted poetess!

Jenna Logan
Date: 8/20/2020 4:28:00 AM

I'm honored by your comments, Edward. Thank you very much. Your contest themes are always interesting.

Alkas Poetry

Date: 8/15/2020 3:10:00 AM

Splendid poem my dear... so sad, but so true... congrats salute alkas

Jenna Logan
Date: 8/16/2020 3:51:00 PM

Thank you for reading and commenting.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 8/12/2020 1:27:00 AM

We write because we have to; I know now that you have no choice. It is in your soul. This is clear.

Jenna Logan
Date: 8/12/2020 7:05:00 AM

I'm enjoying reading all of the comments you've left for me today. Thank you for the generosity of your time for reading and leaving your remarks.

John Gondolf

Date: 8/7/2020 1:24:00 PM

A very nicely composed Dizain, Jenna. Good luck in the contest. I don't know who you are in competition with but I am guessing they don't stand a chance. Hugs, John

Jenna Logan
Date: 8/7/2020 1:26:00 PM

We're battling, John. It's all in fun, and adds a little more interest to entering contests. Thank you for the compliments.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 8/7/2020 12:17:00 PM

Sadly something we all experience in our lives, but we pick ourselves up and carry on. Good luck Tom P S. Your pen must dip in a bottomless inkwell lol

Jenna Logan
Date: 8/7/2020 1:25:00 PM

Hi John, I guess I did. :) That's ok, Tom. I'm going to trust both of you.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/7/2020 1:25:00 PM

My lips are sealed, you should have Soupmailed me, John knows lol.

John Hamilton
Date: 8/7/2020 1:13:00 PM

Looks like you just did lol!

Jenna Logan
Date: 8/7/2020 1:02:00 PM

Thank goodness we don't have to buy ink or keep up with pens since we have keyboards. I know I'm writing a lot but there is a method to my madness...I'm in friendly competition with a poet, who will remain anonymous. The challenge is to see who can climb higher on the contest list...but don't tell anyone. :)

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 8/7/2020 11:50:00 AM

So poignant tale of lost love, the ending line so evocative of despair and loss, wishing you luck in the contest, Jenna.

Jenna Logan
Date: 8/7/2020 12:58:00 PM

Thank you very much, Michelle.