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Untold

From swaying branches, russet leaves are swept fluttering like butterflies, descending For their demise and for lost love, I wept in sorrow, I admit ours is ending No use in denying or pretending The causes are vague and remain untold Vows will be broken, 'to have and to hold' Teardrops will flow when I whisper "goodbye" Grief makes me shiver; my hands, icy cold A gathering of clouds darkens the sky August 7th, 2020 Pick-A-Title Vol 21 - Dizain Contest Title Chosen: Untold Sponsor: Edward Ibeh

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Date: 8/20/2020 3:47:00 PM
Grief makes me shiver too. This is such a well written poem of separation and the attendant sadness. I agree with Jan, first class. Congrats on your number 1!
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Jenna Logan
Date: 8/21/2020 6:32:00 AM
Thank you an awful lot for your kindness, John. It's sincerely appreciated.
Date: 8/20/2020 11:17:00 AM
excellent ink jenna, you are a first class poet and it shows in every poem you post:-) many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
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Jenna Logan
Date: 8/21/2020 6:32:00 AM
aww thank you so much, Jan. You are a combination of so many wonderful things. I see that in your poetry, too.
Date: 8/19/2020 6:01:00 PM
Wonderfully written Jenna! Congratulations on your top win!!
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Jenna Logan
Date: 8/20/2020 4:28:00 AM
Thank you, Mark. You're so supportive.
Date: 8/19/2020 4:59:00 PM
Heartiest congratulations for your top win in my contest with this magnificent poem, Jenna:-) You're such a gifted poetess!
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Jenna Logan
Date: 8/20/2020 4:28:00 AM
I'm honored by your comments, Edward. Thank you very much. Your contest themes are always interesting.
Date: 8/15/2020 3:10:00 AM
Splendid poem my dear... so sad, but so true... congrats salute alkas
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Jenna Logan
Date: 8/16/2020 3:51:00 PM
Thank you for reading and commenting.
Date: 8/12/2020 1:27:00 AM
We write because we have to; I know now that you have no choice. It is in your soul. This is clear.
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Jenna Logan
Date: 8/12/2020 7:05:00 AM
I'm enjoying reading all of the comments you've left for me today. Thank you for the generosity of your time for reading and leaving your remarks.
Date: 8/8/2020 9:32:00 AM
Unspoken, perhaps, Jenna, but not "untold". Really excellent.
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Jenna Logan
Date: 8/8/2020 3:11:00 PM
Thank you, Jim. I appreciate your kind thoughts.
Date: 8/7/2020 1:24:00 PM
A very nicely composed Dizain, Jenna. Good luck in the contest. I don't know who you are in competition with but I am guessing they don't stand a chance. Hugs, John
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Jenna Logan
Date: 8/7/2020 1:26:00 PM
We're battling, John. It's all in fun, and adds a little more interest to entering contests. Thank you for the compliments.
Date: 8/7/2020 12:17:00 PM
Sadly something we all experience in our lives, but we pick ourselves up and carry on. Good luck Tom P S. Your pen must dip in a bottomless inkwell lol
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Jenna Logan
Date: 8/7/2020 1:25:00 PM
Hi John, I guess I did. :) That's ok, Tom. I'm going to trust both of you.
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/7/2020 1:25:00 PM
My lips are sealed, you should have Soupmailed me, John knows lol.
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John Hamilton
Date: 8/7/2020 1:13:00 PM
Looks like you just did lol!
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Jenna Logan
Date: 8/7/2020 1:02:00 PM
Thank goodness we don't have to buy ink or keep up with pens since we have keyboards. I know I'm writing a lot but there is a method to my madness...I'm in friendly competition with a poet, who will remain anonymous. The challenge is to see who can climb higher on the contest list...but don't tell anyone. :)
Date: 8/7/2020 11:50:00 AM
So poignant tale of lost love, the ending line so evocative of despair and loss, wishing you luck in the contest, Jenna.
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Jenna Logan
Date: 8/7/2020 12:58:00 PM
Thank you very much, Michelle.