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The first two limericks I posted the other day but Sara Kendrick requested that I write a sequel so added four more, I've included the two from the other day should you wish to read it in its entirety. Bank robber Jim was one unlucky bloke Went to draw his gun but the holster broke It dropped on the bank floor And went off with a roar The shock was too much and he had a stroke... Though he was unconscious he hadn't died Woke in a coffin for his final ride In a desparate bid Banged on the coffin lid But all he could hear was laughing outside... Written on 17th June 2021 Then someone shouted can you hear banging It was quite faint because folks were singing The sheriff prised off the lid And he was so glad he did Because he thought we'll have us a hanging... Jim didn't know whether to laugh or cry Resigned himself to the fact that he'd die Saw sheriff holding a rope Realised there was no hope And for unlucky Jim the end was nigh... He was taken to the gallows in town Handcuffed and wearing nothing but a frown Jim was then starting to choke But with the drop the rope broke The crowd screamed as poor Jim came tumbling down.. Unlucky Jim jumped up quick as a flash As he passed the bank ran in and grabbed cash He stole the first horse he saw Then let out a loud yee haw And for sweet freedom he made a quick dash... Written 19th June 2021

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Alexis Y.

Date: 7/1/2021 12:36:00 PM

WoW! Tom, I like where you went the story. You’re a good storyteller. I wonder if Jim will get away Scott free? Off to read the next installment. I’m anticipating what’s next:-) Alexis

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/1/2021 12:44:00 PM

Thank you very much Alexis, it was only meant to be two but people wanted more, so kept adding. Tom

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 6/30/2021 10:39:00 AM

The great storyteller rides again. Now you will need to do a sequel to your poems. Have a great and blessed day...............

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/30/2021 1:48:00 PM

Thank you very much Paula, ill have to change this to part two because ive added more, watch this space. Tom

Judy Ball

Date: 6/29/2021 12:46:00 PM

Well it sure was what they would call a mess of a bank job but at least he got away with the cash. After all is said and done I think after two narrow escapes in one day he should maybe use his ill gotten gains to buy a farm and go straight. Good job here Tom. God Bless, JB

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/29/2021 1:34:00 PM

Thank you very much Judy, sadly many don't change their ways until its too late.. Tom

Delice Arleen Skelly

Date: 6/29/2021 5:13:00 AM

Unlucky Jim's escapades make for a humorous poem. And in escaping he finally got lucky...Delice

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/29/2021 5:17:00 AM

Thank you very much Delice, it finished on a lucky note for Jim but that could soon change lol Tom

Sandra Adams

Date: 6/28/2021 6:32:00 PM

Wow... for all his wrong doings he sure was rewarded in the end, because poor Jim ain't poor no more... always loved your limericks... great story through this string of them... hugs

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/29/2021 4:07:00 AM

Thank you very much Sandra, it was originally two but Sara requested a sequel, working on a final finale now. lol. Tom

Justin Abdool

Date: 6/28/2021 5:54:00 PM

Oh that poor Jim. I guess crime does pay off for him! Great and funny write Tom. Justin.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/29/2021 4:04:00 AM

Thank you very much Justin, they don't call him unlucky Jim for nothing, watch this space. Hope you're well. Tom

Line Gauthier

Date: 6/28/2021 5:31:00 AM

Can't wait for the sequel ~ you have such great storytelling skills, Tom ~

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/28/2021 10:01:00 AM

Thank you very much Line, glad you enjoyed it, I'll see what I can do. Tom

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 6/24/2021 6:53:00 AM

Are you sure this is finished? What fun. Enjoyed the read.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/24/2021 7:05:00 AM

Thank you Scott, originally it was only two limericks but due to a request extended it to five, as you've noticed I've left the door ajar, watch this space lol. Tom

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 6/23/2021 7:21:00 AM

Lucky Jim, got away with his life and the banks cash. Fantastic limericks Tom, most entertaining…… Always laughing was bank robber Jim - Even though Jim lived his life in sin - Made plenty of money - To spend on his honey - She loved every bank raid she joined in.….. Belle

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/23/2021 11:45:00 AM

Love your comment Belle, well his luck changed, for the moment, watch this space lol. Tom

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 6/22/2021 12:21:00 PM

Well, so far Jim seems to be a very fortunate bank robber - will his luck last out, wait for the next gripping episode! Well penned To, Blessings, Jennifer.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/22/2021 12:35:00 PM

Thank you very much Jennifer, well his luck changed for the better, but for how long we shall see, watch this space. Tom

Rama Balasubramanian

Date: 6/21/2021 4:55:00 AM

Changed first line to I have been on move since birth. Is it ok now?

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/21/2021 5:15:00 AM

Thanks :)

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/21/2021 5:05:00 AM

Hi Rama, I'd say move is a verb so should be ok. I'm no expert though hopefully others will read it too. Tom

Rama Balasubramanian

Date: 6/21/2021 3:58:00 AM

Tom your comment on Potd got deleted. Just saw it is not there

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/21/2021 4:10:00 AM

Aghh well, you win some you lose some. Enjoy the glory of being first. Ill revisit now, people will think I overslept lol. Tom

Gershon Wolf

Date: 6/20/2021 6:02:00 PM

Yay! Unlucky Jim gets away... lives another day... and can continue as the subject of the next T.C. limerick special. Hope so. Laughter and Guffaws, gw

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/21/2021 12:18:00 AM

Thank you very much Gershon, it was Sara who prompted me to continue and as you say the stable door is left open for the continuing saga of jim. Tom

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/20/2021 12:20:00 PM

I love how you let him get away. Cool!!!

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/20/2021 12:24:00 PM

Lol, for now Andrea, his adventures lucky or otherwise may continue. Tom

Krish Radhakrishna

Date: 6/20/2021 11:39:00 AM

very good Tom! you are the Limerick champ of poetry soup!! quite a story but the outlaw got away!!

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/20/2021 12:23:00 PM

Thank you very much Krish, im happy you enjoyed the humour. Tom

James Marshall Goff

Date: 6/20/2021 8:29:00 AM

Great skill effortlessly!

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/20/2021 8:31:00 AM

Thank you very much James, glad you enjoyed it. Tom

Janice Canerdy

Date: 6/20/2021 5:04:00 AM

Sounds like lucky Jim to me. Great limericks, Tom! :-) Janice

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/20/2021 5:22:00 AM

Thank you Janice, that was a glitch lol, his luck could change again. Enjoy your Sunday. Tom

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/20/2021 4:37:00 AM

Well, did Jim amend his ways or did he do wrong once the money ran out and the horse became old? How long could we keep this one going?. LOL..I enjoyed reading the first ones again and the sequel. Very creative and well written. Sara

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/20/2021 5:01:00 AM

Thank you very much Sara, leopard never changes his spots, I fear he'll rob again. Glad you enjoyed the sequel. Have a lovely Sunday.. Tom

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 6/20/2021 2:53:00 AM

I never expected such a conclusion to your fabulous tale, my dearest friend, Tom. I loved the story and laughed and frowned alternately till the last glorious Limerick came to crown your hilarious story. Blessings.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/20/2021 3:08:00 AM

Thank you very much Demetrios, Sara had hinted at a sequel and I thought why not, I thought I'd give Jim a break, for now lol. Tom

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 6/19/2021 4:18:00 PM

Hello Tom … I’ll bet I could never be unlucky as Jim and if I did get this far I’d probably get struck by lightning while counting the cash - thanks for the giggle Tom - Lindsay

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/20/2021 1:47:00 AM

Thank you Lindsay, glad you came across the finale. The story may continue at some stage. Tom

Terry Flood

Date: 6/19/2021 2:59:00 PM

You should write for the movies, Tom. They always leave it open for a sequel. Crafty that. Looking forward to ‘Unlucky Jim 3’. Terry

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/19/2021 3:07:00 PM

Thank you very much Terry, that's me, always save a bit for a rainy day. Watch this space, he aint called unlucky jim for nothing lol. Tom

Sotto Poet

Date: 6/19/2021 12:38:00 PM

I thought this was immaculate, Tom. Thank you very much for sharing this series of poems. I have always enjoyed your Limericks; smiling is always good for the brain. Make the most of your weekend!

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/19/2021 12:41:00 PM

Thank you very much Lasaad, Sara requested a sequel siI was happy to oblige, hope you too have a lovely weekend. Tom

Rico Leffanta

Date: 6/19/2021 11:00:00 AM

I love a good serial with my cereal!

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/19/2021 11:02:00 AM

Lol, thanks for your return visit Rico. Tom

L Milton Hankins

Date: 6/19/2021 9:59:00 AM

Hilarious!!!! Tom, you've hit the jackpot with this one!

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/19/2021 10:56:00 AM

Thank you very much Milton, Sara requested a follow up and then my muse started bombarding me with ideas lol. Tom

Rama Balasubramanian

Date: 6/19/2021 5:16:00 AM

Ha! Ha! Ha! That was really awesome. Please keep posting these Limericks. Laughing is good for health. I can't stop laughing... Thanks! Enjoy your weekend!

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/19/2021 5:25:00 AM

Thank you very much Rama, im pleased that you enjoyed the humour. Tom