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Two To Tango

Two are needed one will not do Words can do up due to your hue Only one can’t make a senryu Shadows of your long eyelashes Twinkling motives in those sea eyes Asking me for fountain-splashes Northerly wind from the old skies Zen-like moment shines in stanzas After we put down our brown pen Sometimes stars come down to join us ________________________________________ July 22, 2016 Two Stanzas – Two Only contest Sponsor : Broken Wings

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Date: 7/26/2016 10:16:00 AM
Well my friend it looks like congratulations are in order and i can understand why with this work. Congratulations on your placement. This was a different take on the contest Probir. My favourite line is "Twinkling motives in those sea eyes, yes it sets my mind alight for some reason. Actually if i think on it i like the ambience af the whole piece. Well thought out my friend....Mike.
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Probir Gupta
Date: 7/26/2016 12:05:00 PM
Well, may be it is so. Inspiration of the then perceptions crystallising into the poetry of those moments are no more as vivid ... may be this is why a poem is as a reader finds it ... especially so when a poem is metaphor based ... what pleases me the sponsor so kindly has given it approval as HM at least ...
Date: 7/26/2016 7:18:00 AM
Congrats Probir, for your placement with this wonderful piece!! ;-)
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Probir Gupta
Date: 7/26/2016 9:08:00 AM
Thank you ...
Date: 7/25/2016 10:40:00 PM
Congratulations on your win,Probir!
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Probir Gupta
Date: 7/25/2016 11:35:00 PM
Thank you Eve ... Congratulations on your top win too ...
Date: 7/25/2016 4:31:00 PM
Great take on the two stanza's theme Probir - congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Probir Gupta
Date: 7/25/2016 11:36:00 PM
Thank you ...
Date: 7/25/2016 3:28:00 PM
I like the line about shadows on long eyelashes. Very well done, Probir.
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Probir Gupta
Date: 7/25/2016 11:37:00 PM
Yes Lin ... For me, On long eye lashes/Fountain splashes ... Thank you ...

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