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Crutch, a hatchling's nest, breaks into a bale,
                    Fledglings purposeth an arduous life,
Much trek a nearby beach whereon, they flail,
                    Bearings of ocean's girth, between lays strife,
Touch by their needs, determined without fail,
                    Endings in a wet world, shared breeds a rife,

     Trouble goes on well into adulthood,
     Humble with a long life, honored for good.

**Syllable Counter checked 10, 10, 10, 10, 10, 10 - 10, 10 = 80.


Date: 06/05/2019

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Date: 7/1/2019 3:06:00 PM
This is a great entry for the contest William. Congratulations on your win in my contest. Blessings ~Charlie
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William Kekaula
Date: 7/1/2019 3:58:00 PM
Thanks charles ~ William
Date: 6/5/2019 6:00:00 PM
This is amazing, William: First, that you've crafted a real tribute to a tortoise, of all creatures. Second, that you've attempted a difficult form of poetry, the ottova rima. Third, that you've actually produced a fine tribute to a tortoise in actual ottova rima form. I'm impressed. I'm FAVing this one! :) gw
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Date: 6/5/2019 6:24:00 PM
FAV seals humility to overflow GW--THANKS A BUNCH, Aloha William
Date: 6/5/2019 2:53:00 AM
I detest humans who kill turtles for a bit of unsavoury soup. You did well with this ottava rima. Do you not intend to enter it in the contest? It would ned a date surely.
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Date: 6/5/2019 3:28:00 AM
Thanks, I entered another but I think I will enter this is best Victor, Aloha William--btw, never had that soup nor will I ever.
Date: 6/5/2019 2:51:00 AM
They are truly honored! Great work!
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Date: 6/5/2019 3:30:00 AM
My many thanks Vincent--and that they are good, Aloha William