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There lies my heart, Quite ragged, torn - My father passed This brumal morn ... How ruthless came This face of death, Warm on my cheek, His last, soft breath ... Yet blessed, was I, Thru grand design, To walk him home, His hand ... in mine ... Oh treasure, sweet, The folks you love - Too brief the flame, Burns life, thereof. ~ 3rd Place ~ in the "Strand Select 8, Any Form, Any Theme" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Judge & Sponsor. * This was read at Dad's service on December 10, 2019, and published in the local paper. He and I were never close, and he had never held my hand until the photo above, (though he was unconscious and never again awake). It is the last picture taken of him. Despite our distance, I was honored to be the one with him when he passed. * ( I love you, Dad ... I'll never know a better man, in every sense of the word ).

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Date: 4/2/2020 8:56:00 AM
(2) But they provided for us and protected us and that is how they showed their love - that, and their consistency. My dad never held my hand until he was 79 and dying of cancer, but it is a cherished moment for me. You wrote your deepest heart into this poem, and that plus the indelible image of a son holding his father's hand bring tears and make this a fave. I'm finding it hard to breathe right now... Thank you so much for this, my poetry brother.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 4/2/2020 6:50:00 PM
(4) Yet, I was truly honored to be his son, and I miss him far more than I expected. Blessings, Brother ... thank you for this. <3
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Date: 4/2/2020 6:47:00 PM
(2) Sadly, kids need and want LOVE most of all, so those opportunities came up short. My dad also resented my closeness with my mom, (from an early age), so he never did anything with me ... he was always around, but rarely involved. BOTH his parents were cold, so he was never given the tools and I don't blame him, but it was still the greatest hurt in my life ...
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 4/2/2020 6:47:00 PM
(3) I'm still going through anger and frustrations related to his neglect. He never even said "I love you" until last year, and then partly due to his dementia, but he meant it, I know. All said, I STILL adored the man, and he had not a single enemy, and was a truly GOOD man, in every respect ... he just was never a "Daddy", and that hurt deeply ...
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Date: 4/2/2020 6:45:00 PM
(1) John, My Friend, this means more than I can say, and your wonderfully heartfelt comments brought tears to my eyes, (something that's pretty rare now). You are so right - that generation of fathers concentrated on providing, and my dad did that to perfection, giving my sibs and I opportunities and things that not many others had in my town, and he did it by working long, long hours ...
Date: 4/2/2020 8:50:00 AM
Greg, you left a very kind comment on the poem I wrote for my mom, which was read at her service. Your comment, I think, was what allowed me that first glimpse of what a compassionate heart you have. I went back to that poem and comment today, on the 3rd anniversary of her passing, and was reminded what a good Soup friend you have been. Our fathers were of a generation that we can barely fathom... their affections and communications were of a more stoic nature.
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Date: 1/11/2020 5:25:00 PM
Gregory congratulations on your win!;)
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/12/2020 12:26:00 AM
Thank you so very much, Brenda! :o) <3
Date: 10/30/2019 5:41:00 PM
Beautiful bittersweet poem. May the Lord comfort you as you grieve.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/1/2019 12:18:00 AM
That's is very kind of you, Juliet, and I am so thankful that you took time to leave these words of sympathy and comfort. Blessings. <3
Date: 10/27/2019 10:25:00 PM
So sad and sorry for your loss. It is hard to grieve. God bless you and be with you, Gina
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/1/2019 12:16:00 AM
Thank you so very much, Regina, that is kind of you, and I so appreciate your words of sympathy. Blessings. <3
Date: 10/27/2019 3:54:00 PM
My sincerest condolences, Gregory. Your poem is a beautiful tribute. A FAVE for me.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/1/2019 12:15:00 AM
Thank you so very much, Line, that is very sweet of you. Blessings. <3
Date: 10/27/2019 12:41:00 PM
Hi Greg, so sorry to hear the sad news, he was a good man as you say. My deepest condolences dear poet!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/1/2019 12:15:00 AM
Many kind thanks, Brother, it is much appreciated ... I so wished to hear those words I longed for my whole life: "I am proud of you, Son", but alas, that is not to be. Life goes on, as mine must - he loved me in his way, and I am thankful for that. Blessings. <3
Date: 10/27/2019 11:21:00 AM
Something jiggled my senses to look into the soup today, and I see this. Greg, my thoughts and sympathies are with you. I sincerely hope you can take some small measure of comfort in knowing what is to come for your Dad.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/1/2019 12:13:00 AM
Thank you so much, Dear Lin, for these kind words of comfort and for putting it in the correct perspective ... my heart will never heal, but he is where he belongs now and no longer suffering - body or mind. Blessings to you, My Friend. <3

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