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The Un-Dead

At the Borgo Pass I met a coach and horse, And the villagers warned me not to go, They were worried about a supernatural force, But I had business in Transylvania, though. The coach rumbled along the Carpathian mountain road, Through the lightning and pounding rain, We arrived at an old, darkened abode, And I thought this trip was all in "vein". But then opened the great castle door, And the Count bid me welcome to his house, He cast no shadow on the floor, Where scurried a bat and a mouse. In the mirror he cast no reflection, On our dinner he did not dine, And upon my curious inspection, He drank no water or wine. Then late that night I awoke with fright, As something hovered over my bed, Then I felt a quick, sharp bite, From a vampire who's eyes glowed red. Then cried the children of the night, As all at once, there shined a beam, I awoke to see a ray of sunlight, And realized it was all just a dream. (This poem was my tribute to "Dracula" by Bram Stoker)

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Date: 4/16/2014 7:55:00 PM
Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 4/16/2014 6:13:00 PM
HEY KELLY, Congratulations, enjoyed stopping by. Luv ~SKAT~
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Date: 4/15/2014 8:02:00 AM
Feeling like Bram Stoker is alive. Congrats on the win, kelly
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 4/15/2014 11:07:00 PM
Thank you very much, Dr. Ram. Darren's contest was a fun one to be a part of! :)
Date: 12/6/2013 4:43:00 PM
Kelly What a creative and unique story rhyme. You take the reader on a journey into a creepy and scary world, that seems so real. Dream or not, it is still dark and eerie. Nice job my friend Thanks for the great and sweet comment on my Holiday Heartache poem.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/6/2013 10:33:00 PM
Thank you very much, Robin. I had a lot of fun writing this poem!
Date: 9/30/2013 11:58:00 AM
Very visual done quit well I enjoyed the journey to the world of the un-dead. It is a adventureious ride to travel beyond the world of light into the realm of the darker realm. Thank you for sharing your work and for your comments on mine.
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Date: 9/20/2013 2:16:00 AM
it is but not a dream only your imagination Miss Kelly see you are wide awake! talking and seeing me clearly. . . . sorry i just had to add. . . exciting poem with the movie speed x40!
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Date: 9/15/2013 3:47:00 PM
I don't like dark stuff much Kelly but I found your rhyming quatrains to be an exceptional flow of thoughts. Its great to be back to peruse your work once more.
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Date: 9/12/2013 1:58:00 PM
Hi Kelly,"You dream of creepy darkness... but still you dream," Beautiful ....xox...Linda
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Date: 9/12/2013 11:46:00 AM
Glad it was just a dream..Enjoyed reading your work that has great rhyme, rhythm, and flow..I feel a lighthearted emotion flow throughout even though it is serious..Thanks for your visit to my page..Your comment was encouraging...Sara
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Date: 9/12/2013 11:17:00 AM
I ENJOYED THIS KELLY BEAUTIFUL PIECE
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Date: 9/11/2013 8:34:00 PM
You are a story teller extraordinaire! An excellent write... hugs, Jack xoxox
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Date: 9/11/2013 6:51:00 PM
Great feel to this :)
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Date: 9/11/2013 5:08:00 PM
Really great writing. you are in control of your craft. You gain control of the readers and control them to the end..... Well done, my friend..... Hugs aplenty..... Jake
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Date: 9/11/2013 4:55:00 PM
Cool piece; really felt like Bram Stoker's "Dracula". I felt like I was in the movie as I was reading; kudos! :)
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