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The Scar - Written In Collaboration By Lynn Marie and Victor Buhagiar

Are you happy with your work doctor? Look at me when I talk to you. I looked in the mirror you know. Mirrors don't lie. What you see is what you get. Like a miserable computer. Is this the best you can do? Look at my scar. Red? Livid red I should say. The best aesthetic surgeon in the world! He slowly rises his eyes to meet mine. Calmly he reminds me what has taken place. The surgery is always risky. The damage done, he grasps Desperately to say more words, Any word to vanquish the villainous hate hurled at him. I can see how he wills me To look into his eyes, begging silently for grace. I feel the purple bulge of blood Beat frantic under my pale skin. Denial fighting reality My volcanic pain slips one tear. He pleads me to see his afflictions, Hides putrid human failings That are not borne for this spleen of contempt. I fume, screaming inside my words back. Look at me! Look at my scar! Mirrors don't lie. Then he comes out with one fantastic idea: "I'll pay for everything. All you need Is a dainty cheek tattoo!" For my first collaboration to be with Victor, is an honour and experience I will cherish forever. To Victor, I am especially grateful and appreciate your generosity, time, kindness and sage tutorials. You are a true gentleman, extraordinary Poet and a beautiful friend. Thank youxx 04-09-2017

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Date: 8/24/2017 3:03:00 AM
what a beautiful post my friend. Congregations on the excellent collaboration. you penned this poem well.
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Date: 7/3/2017 5:09:00 PM
A wonderful collaboration from you both. Delving into the sensitivities of one who has been scarred for life. You have expressed those feelings of hopelessness at what cannot be changed marvelously! You make a great writing team! : )
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Date: 5/5/2017 10:47:00 AM
Hi Lyn, you and Victor have written an excellent poem on the chosen subject. Many people would not have written on such a subject and you both do and come out with such a wonderful write. It always goes to show that two poets with great skill can hone any subject into excellence of the pen. This has to be a seven and a Fav. I shall drop by Victor in a moment. Take care. Have a great day. Hugs....Mike. XX
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Date: 4/14/2017 1:26:00 PM
This work speaks of good "work/worship" that PS seems to encourage. It's a big deal for me; otherwise some folks make our planet worse than they entered it. In the name of security, we do still crucify our enemies. This optional surgery-gone-bad, has a scar that reminds me of Jesus's scars. I read this days ago ... I need self-control as a writer. LOL (thanks to Victor Buhagiar). Shalom
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Date: 4/14/2017 5:39:00 AM
EXCELLENT COLLABORATION ON A VERY SENSITIVE SUBJECT, FACIAL SCARS. Such great creativity and congrats on your first collaboration together. Victor is a great poet and a fine gentleman that inspires others with his poetry and great character. You two have created a unique and excellent piece.
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Date: 4/12/2017 4:00:00 PM
Dear Lynn and Victor. Congratulations on your collaboration. We readers followed along and were right in the scene as it was unfolding. The ending is priceless and never did you stray from the title. Well done throughout.
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Date: 4/12/2017 2:54:00 PM
Great story, great poetry, great collaboration and respect for co-authors! I am encouraged. Shalom/Blessings, A. Deo
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Date: 4/11/2017 8:23:00 AM
You all have created a most unique piece. Well done!
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Date: 4/10/2017 9:20:00 PM
A beautifully blended effort, congratulations to you both...
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Date: 4/10/2017 4:58:00 PM
Nice poem written by both you and Victor...Thank you so very much for reading "A Mother's Love For Her Child Is Unconditional" and leaving a meaningful encouragement. The poem was written inspired by my niece and her daughter in the photo ~*
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Date: 4/10/2017 11:06:00 AM
The words have no hidden agenda or message, instead it focuses the reader to the fact that sometimes the most simple and basic thoughts define the subject matter the best. Emile.
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Date: 4/9/2017 9:11:00 PM
A nice write for both of you.
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Date: 4/9/2017 8:37:00 PM
thanks for all your comments today too, dear. I am always trying to catch up here and as usual I did not get caught up tonight! See ya later!
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Date: 4/9/2017 8:36:00 PM
oh my, what a TWIST at the end. Who thought that ending up?And whatever made you guys come up with this theme? It's so fun to read. LOVE it!! Great job with Victor. he is a sweetie.
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Date: 4/9/2017 4:39:00 AM
Facial scars are such a sensitive subject as they are so visible.You portrayed this issues so vividly - from painful powerful images to a fabulous uplifting happy ending - would be lovely to have this poem sent to GP's surgeries and then maybe they would be a little more understanding. Bravo Lynn and Victor:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 4/9/2017 3:47:00 AM
Ohhh Lynn and Victor, this is outstanding! Congratulations on a wonderful collaboration... The subject is literally painful, but every line is a little gem, and I am awed.
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