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The Old Store Sign The opaque timeworn words, slightly graphic upon the termite scarred wood that dangles mercilessly by unforgiving winds, neath the half-torn awning of a boarded-up, abandoned building. It suggests that there were a time, the store formerly entertained shoppers. Though what was sold there remained an ongoing mystery. life provides a theme a sign of the time whispers ... deathless consciousness *1st Place* ALL YOURS (Apr 23) ~~Brian Strand: Judged 2021 April 22 *2nd Place* Moments Of Reflections - Haibun ~~Malabika Ray Choudhury: Judged 2021 May 11

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Carol Louise Moon

Date: 5/14/2021 9:24:00 AM

Very strong haibun, William, and I like the haiku at the end. Well-done. Congratulations on your fine win. Carol Louise

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/14/2021 10:45:00 AM

Thank you kindly, Carol, I am truly grateful my friend, Aloha!

Sam Kauffman

Date: 5/12/2021 11:16:00 AM

William, old signs, buildings and homes are a source of fascination for me. What is their story. Who are the people they welcomed or housed? In a way they speak aloha. Masterfully spoken pondering, my friend. Congratulations. Blessings and Aloha.

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/12/2021 11:26:00 AM

Wondrous hindsight, Sam, involving depth and understanding, you truly honor me my friend, Aloha!

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 5/11/2021 4:45:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. Best wishes ~ Mala

Kim Merryman

Date: 4/24/2021 8:55:00 AM

William, congrats on your win with this descriptive haibun! Blessings, Kim M

Hilo Poet
Date: 4/24/2021 11:22:00 AM

Thank you, Kim, for your endearment, Aloha!

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 4/23/2021 11:04:00 AM

Your wonderful haibun took me on a nostalgic journey William. The place where my mother was born looks very much like this minus the weeds and it is still standing. So well expressed. Congratulations on your deserving first place. Blessings xxoo

Hilo Poet
Date: 4/23/2021 12:50:00 PM

Beautiful, a walk in the past that enlightens the wanderer, wondrous share, Connie, that moments me a trek with my mom as well. The lava took our weeds and all else but my memories restored every nailed wood of our home--you're an angel my friend, Aloha!

Vijay Pandit

Date: 4/23/2021 4:15:00 AM

Your poem deserves to be at TOP of #1. Even without the photo, I see the images of old store in your words. Congrats, William.

Hilo Poet
Date: 4/23/2021 12:37:00 PM

I am honored, Vijay, albeit, having sponsored I remain baffled, whereby, the system generates its placements, anyhow, I appreciate you, Aloha!

Gary Radice

Date: 4/22/2021 10:59:00 PM

Wonderful haibun William! I've listened and I've read. Fantastic imagery. I saw your words even without the photo. Congratulations. Cheers - Gary

Hilo Poet
Date: 4/22/2021 11:35:00 PM

I am grateful for the caring thoughts placed in your words, Gary, for they are well-received my friend, Aloha!

Jan Allison

Date: 4/3/2021 9:55:00 AM

such vivid imagery William i especially love the middle line of the haiku:-) hugs jan xx

Hilo Poet
Date: 4/3/2021 7:18:00 PM

I am very appreciative of your endearing insights, Jan, enjoy your Eastertime mon ami, Aloha!