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The Last Time They Heard Your Voice - Emotive Write For Contest

Hey guys you thought it was fun to joy ride Steal a car and go wild Racing through the streets Faster and faster You were heading for disaster Your passenger can be heard shouting on his mobile to another friend SLOW DOWN! SLOW DOWN! But the driver laughs The police are chasing Blue lights flashing He doesn’t want to get caught .... and end up in court The speed increases Ninety miles an hour SLOW DOWN! SLOW DOWN! You can hear the panic rising in his voice But he’s strapped in the passenger seat What started as fun is a living nightmare Left turn, right turn Weaving and dodging the cars on the street Then they reach the point of no return CRASHHHHHHHHHHHH Sadly this is loosely based on an audio transcript from the video recorded on the passengers phone and was the last recording of their voices so I’ve written it as if it were a final phone call - the footage was released by the parents to act as a warning to other youngsters Contest Last Call Sponsor Casarah Nance 10~15~15

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Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 10/21/2015 7:52:00 AM

when tragedy strikes and deaths hook at hand.... action pack write Jan.. ~Olive =`) hugs!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/21/2015 7:58:00 AM

thanks Olive:-) hugs Jan xx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/16/2015 12:33:00 PM

Enjoyed your very emotive work..Reads like a winner..Sad that this things happen..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Jan Allison
Date: 10/16/2015 12:45:00 PM

Thanks for dropping by Sara:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 10/16/2015 10:58:00 AM

Powerful and expressive! I saw the video and you caught the tragic spirit that it portrays. Unfortunately, these are not one-off incidents. Euphoria, drink and drugs are a formula for tragedy. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 10/16/2015 11:22:00 AM

I do hope that the youngsters take note of this tragedy - why it is called 'joy riding' is sadly far from the truth:-( hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 10/15/2015 11:14:00 PM

I saw the video Jan, heart wrenching, and this poem, well loved it, if only 1 person stops and thinks beforehand, expressing this is all worth it!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/16/2015 2:19:00 AM

There is poetic licence here - I interpreted the video as a 'final call' - I guess in one way it was - seeing it was simply heartbreaking and I agree if it stops just one person that has to be a good thing to come out of such a tragedy:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/15/2015 3:36:00 PM

Good thinking for her contest, Jan. Keep on that roll. You think up so many poems every week. It's admirable!! (how is your day?)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2015 3:39:00 PM

I've posted 2 today as the god contest was near to closing but I don't think i will place - just have to go with the flow of my muse - i wrote this last night - have seen the footage of the crash - its traumatising to watch but if it prevents another un necessary death of a youngster it will be worth it:-) hugs Jan xx

Kp Nunez

Date: 10/15/2015 1:00:00 PM

A sad fact that these things continue to happen, Jan. Very good tale on the prompt. All the best in that contest. hugs!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2015 1:04:00 PM

It really hit home seeing the footage and knowing the parents would never hear from these two lads again - aged 20 and 21 - another tragedy ... yet still it goes on:-(

Eileen Manassian

Date: 10/15/2015 12:02:00 PM

So sad, Dear. SO very sad. What a tragedy. Good luck in the contest. I've missed you. Hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2015 12:08:00 PM

So lovely to see you back Eileen:-) hugs Jan xx

Dan Cwiak

Date: 10/15/2015 11:39:00 AM

This is a fitting tribute to those who die in accidents of this kind all over the world each day. It put me back to some of my more youthful days, where invulnerability and stupidity are sometimes the only words to describe the thinking that got us into the situation. Great write, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2015 11:49:00 AM

It happened in the UK recently Dan and the parents had the video played so that it acts as a warning - just hope and pray some take notice as their are too many of these young people back losing their lives:-( hugs Jan xx

Caycay Jennings

Date: 10/15/2015 8:40:00 AM

Your dramatic poem, works. I was there, pressing on the brake! Emotive indeed! Very well written ... CayCay

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2015 9:09:00 AM

Thanks CayCay the video of the event was truly frightening and I hope it would act as a deterrent to those who joy ride - the pain of the parents to witness their sons final journey must be so hard to deal with :-( hugs Jan xx