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Demoness ... Tread soft near me, pray thee ... tread light and soft ... shall I yet awaken to the warmth of your hellfire? I am your infernal progeny, birthed of you and Heaven ... I have been torn with your ire ... I have been rent and burned by the cold flames of your skin on mine ... Dare you mix such immaculate flesh with this gypsy, forsaken? I am thrall, with but a taste of your dark nectar. Oh, to pierce you with the keen blade of truth, to slay your hot impiety, kill you with love, and sate the horrid heart's hunger. We swim the moonlight and each other ... bare and bold, torn and told of sacred secrets gained in treason. Let that lie be our salvation ... we rise in desire - we soar erotic, prurient, woven, interlaced ... One. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Brian's Choice 4, Any Form, Any Theme" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Judge & Sponsor.

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Winged Warrior

Date: 5/7/2020 5:21:00 AM

Very slick bro...Congrats!! on your win Gregory...be safe and best wishes from the Wingster :o)

Eve Roper

Date: 5/6/2020 3:35:00 PM

Greg, congratulations on your 1st place win with this beautiful verse. Again, another poem with emotion and imagery . Snakes just make me want to crawl the other direction. Hugs Eve

John Watt

Date: 5/6/2020 3:07:00 PM

Greg, the femme fatale theme really inspires your eloquence! Love the image of the snake, apple, and vermillion nails, so evocative! You alluded to the Eden story nicely with "infernal progeny / birthed of you and Heaven". To "sate the horrid heart's hunger" describes so well the magnetic appeal, even lust of her forbidden fruit. Well done, Bard, and congrats on your win!

Gideon Idudje

Date: 5/6/2020 2:36:00 PM

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Edward Mccall

Date: 7/7/2017 9:40:00 AM

Once again I say you have succeeded in pulling the reader into The seductive Lure of temptation. I look forward to tempted three.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/9/2017 12:56:00 AM

Thanks so much, my friend ... there will certainly be more in this series, and I'm glad you enjoy them! :-)

Darren White

Date: 7/5/2017 2:13:00 AM

Very dark, and sensual in more than one way. Incredible metaphor for sex, and all other addictive seductions. Great, wonderful poem that asks for more in this style.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/9/2017 12:53:00 AM

Thank you so much, Dear Friend, there will definitely be more in this style, as it is my favorite genre! I personally believe that there is MUCH more sensuality in metaphor and ambiguity than there is in being graphic ... the imagination of the reader is really our greatest instrument as poets, and it's fun to learn how to play it deftly! ;-)