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Soothing Restless Thoughts

In an old bus, patience thinned by midnight As my mind drifted along, feeling bleak Wiping hours with restless air in dimmed light Not a robin cooed through skyline's mystique Finding unrest from a breeze in dull shade Where time slept with eyes open, a pale flow, A peasant beside me smiled like glittered jade Changing my face with some kind of halo. His ruffled hair touched my skin without words And I felt silence soothing my complaint; Reaching my hand to offer bread I stored; He said, "life's a pit if that's how it's named." That moment filled my thoughts, a quitter I was Comfort buoyed; ridding hours from senseless flaws. Shadow Hamilton's Three Themes Challenge 8/4/2014 Theme: Chance Meeting

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Date: 8/16/2014 1:25:00 AM
I like the imagery in the poem, nette. Congrats
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Date: 8/16/2014 1:07:00 AM
Wonderful imagery nette n a great write! congrats on win!
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Date: 8/15/2014 9:12:00 PM
Wonderful win...Linda
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Date: 8/15/2014 7:17:00 PM
A gorgeous write, Nette, filled with beautiful imagery and description, but over all--compassion and wisdom. Congratulations.
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Date: 8/15/2014 2:43:00 PM
a wealth of feelings and beauty in this lovely sonnet Nette congrats on placing hugs
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Date: 8/15/2014 2:20:00 PM
incredible write with stunning imagery as ever Nette:-) Many congrats Hugs jan xxx
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Date: 8/10/2014 8:34:00 AM
Once again you astound with messages of wisdom woven through superb images. "Time slept with eyes open"...what a great line.
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Date: 8/8/2014 4:15:00 PM
It takes the meek to concern a lost soul, through ruffled hair touch, he's reached his goal. Poetry with message, that I like, James :)
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Date: 8/8/2014 3:31:00 PM
That is beautiful how his, "His ruffled hair touched" your "skin without words".
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Date: 8/7/2014 2:27:00 PM
When and where from nice thought will come out no one knows and it's practically realized by me that sometimes it comes from a clue of a word also and from a circumstantial phenomena. Excellent job done here, my lovely friend. Loved always, bl
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Date: 8/6/2014 7:10:00 PM
deep and romantically dark Nette much to read between the lines hugs
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Date: 8/6/2014 6:40:00 PM
you exposed the kindness in your soul with this poem and for that I'm filled with joy, "through their own words you shall know them."..a quote from the book of Frederic my poetic friend....and Dave is right about that line..
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Date: 8/6/2014 12:21:00 PM
- Your heart knows........ - my eye looks how good and beautiful you write your thoughts down - Have a nice day my dear friend Nette :) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 8/6/2014 11:28:00 AM
An "eye opening moment " with startling images, Ms. Poet of the Soul. Had a pleasant time writing for your contest. Thank you for motivating me!
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Date: 8/6/2014 10:58:00 AM
this is a rare sonnet from you, nette (I have sonnetphobia - never written one! lol) for me, this is you writing at your absolute best, when you blend striking imagery with down-to-earth reality - exactly the sort of poetry I like to read! :)
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Date: 8/6/2014 10:49:00 AM
Wow Nette ! Another amazing write,, life's a pit,, that's how it really seems sometimes,, hv a great day
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