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I wonder ... Could this be mine - this shadowed heart, a-thrum? It begs me stop, for its cold intent ... your words, those phrases I have ached for, (stolen by me in secret, hidden among your precious roses), given to another on a golden tray of kisses - their keen edge like the beak of a chisel to rend the rocky pounding in my chest and mind, and leave all faiths and fancies in ruin. I am a petty little beast, tucked away in the dark and dirt ... fitting that my sordid spying be done here, where the fruit of your favors blooms so sweetly. But, like the blood of our love, (that now courses and weeps at once), it hides the thorns that rake my skin - that sign this bent deed upon me in crimson - that answer the question that has haunted my existence - and turned me to this snake ... In the grass. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "N-A Rerun 5" Poetry Contest, John Hamilton, Judge & Sponsor. Written December 31, 2019 N/A'd in the "Listening In" Poetry Contest Judged January 12, 2020

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Date: 2/27/2020 4:17:00 PM
I'm amazed this got an n/a first time round and Greg I am delighted to share the podium with you - it is a rarity for me to place with you except in contests where everyone gets top 2 places. my congrats to you:-) hugs Jan xx
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/1/2020 1:59:00 AM
You are and will ALWAYS be one of the poets here that I aspire to, Jan, as you have a command of so many elements - the things that set quality poems apart from the rest, and you are one of the kindest and most joyous people I know - I'm proud to share any podium with you, Dear Poet! :o) <3
Date: 2/27/2020 1:55:00 PM
I am so happy to see this poem receive its deserving First Place Greg! Congratulations! xxoo
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/1/2020 1:56:00 AM
That's very kind of you, Connie - blessings, Dear Poet! :o) <3
Date: 2/22/2020 10:50:00 AM
Greg, great entry and congratulations _Constance
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/1/2020 1:56:00 AM
Thank you very much, Constance.
Date: 2/19/2020 9:47:00 PM
Congratulation Gregory on your win.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/1/2020 1:55:00 AM
Thank you so much.
Date: 2/19/2020 11:31:00 AM
Congratulations for finally getting a great win, Greg, with this one. I just love how you ended this with your becoming the snake in the grass!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/1/2020 1:55:00 AM
Many kind thanks, Andrea, I greatly appreciate it, Buddy! :o) <3
Date: 2/19/2020 11:20:00 AM
Great to see this come in at #1 in Dear Heart's contest, Gregory. I admire the craft that goes into each of your poems. I love the line "like the blood of our love that now courses and weeps at once." I enjoy your pictures too ~ John
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/1/2020 1:54:00 AM
Thank you so very much, John, your opinion means a lot to me ... blessings to you for your kind and honest comments, my friend! :o)

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