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Should I

What is behind that smile? Would she walk with me a while? As her brown eyes dance I’m mesmerized, entranced She stares. What does she know? What gives her cheeks that vibrant glow? Should I ask, perhaps approach? Nay, I fear a coy reproach Content I must be to admire and pass But Mona Lisa’s smile fills my heart of glass For Nathan's perspectives from "The Opposite Sex" challenge

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Fj Thomas

Date: 1/7/2020 9:19:00 AM

Carolyn how absolutely wonderful! I see the contest it was for and I imagine you had to have placed! Brilliant my friend.

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 3/9/2011 4:18:00 PM

How do you do this my friend? I need this in my life.~JS

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/8/2010 2:16:00 PM

Interesting couplets..From a man's point of view..Thanks for stopping by my work about snap shot of man's humanity..Sara

Crystal Cross

Date: 5/19/2010 8:26:00 PM

beautiful. I very much enjoy your writings :) keep it up

Lucinda Bulger

Date: 4/17/2010 8:51:00 AM

This is a very nice write of yours. I enjoyed the read. Classic art always intrigues me because of the simplicities of beauty that are here, available for our view at any time in life... Somehow at times we all seem to be to busy to even see them with the hustle and bustle, where I am at now, I just smile at the old time ways, attitudes, always love the old people. The children always have pertinent views too! :)we can all learn something from them. Yes,"you must be like this Child" Jesus said.

John Patrick Robbins Aka Gonzo

Date: 4/17/2010 5:23:00 AM

great wrok as always Carolyn hope to see you at the pub more wrote a new one would love to here what you think not a funny write but not all my work is cheers my friend

Kim M

Date: 4/16/2010 10:04:00 PM

Your poem captures the allure of Mona Lisa's (any gorgeous woman's) beauty & mystery. I feel the young man's painful lack of confidence (with perhaps, sweaty palms, nervous breath, & bashful blushing) as this potential suitor loses in his battle against his own fear of rejection. Resigned to never getting close enough to speak to her, he'll just watch from the distance. (sigh, the yearning & regret) Wonder whether she ever noticed him looking, and if she felt the same insecurity to speak to him?

Lynette Chachere

Date: 4/16/2010 5:44:00 PM

it's a success Carolyn.you portray her wonderfully.i can see your imagery. this is a pretty interesting contest.it's awesome. good luck. -Always&Forever Lynette

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 4/16/2010 1:39:00 PM

I love that portrait of Monalisa..Mesmerizing..Mysterious..powerful,as these verses..and your Heart of Glass..yes your heart is crystal clear for us to read and share this beauty..Charma

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 4/16/2010 1:02:00 PM

Very nice and good luck in Nathan's first contest... what an experience it will be judging all that have entered thus far from the ones I've read today alone... a great idea he had .. as great as your poetry...luv.. Linda-Marie..

James Fraser

Date: 4/16/2010 9:57:00 AM

If this is not in with the winners, i will eat my hat. Better go buy a hat. Best of luck Carolyn >> James

Audrey Haick

Date: 4/16/2010 9:11:00 AM

Oh, wow! Simply beautiful, Caroly! I know this is a winner...it certainly deserves to be in that circle...loved the way you ended it all! So glad you're feeling better! And thanks for reading and leaving comments-always kind on my poems...Have a really good day, my friend...Love, audrey