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Sewing machine, long idle, gathered dust Old, as mama told, worn, left here to rust I slowly examined the antique piece Candle flame flickered, anxiety increased Nothing odd on top or with pedal gears Was mama bat crazy all these years? Story after story and death bed request I wanted to put an end to this mess The war years seemed like yesterday To granddad who hid most things away Mama willed house, sew table to me Fingers fumbled. "What could this be?" At last, with a smile, I held up a key Now a deposit box deepened mystery Key in purse, blew candle out, happy as lark The candle sputtered, spent, and all was dark
April 16, 2018 One Nine Sixteen Contest* By Viv Wigley Sixth Place *Lines one, nine and sixteen are - 1 - ' Sewing machine, long idle, gathered dust' 9 - 'The war years seemed like only yesterday' 16 - 'The candle sputtered, spent, and all was dark’

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Date: 5/2/2018 9:26:00 PM
I knew I would see this on the winners list, Susan. Many congrats on your win. Elaine
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Susan Gentry
Date: 5/3/2018 12:39:00 AM
:) Thanks so much Elaine! You're so sweet.
Date: 5/2/2018 5:12:00 PM
so many great memories Susan, it seems like times have changed and not for the better, no wonder we cling to the old golden memories. Well done, Congratulations
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Susan Gentry
Date: 5/3/2018 12:39:00 AM
Thank you Pixie. It does seem that way. Appreciate your comment.
Date: 5/2/2018 3:41:00 PM
You found a way to make it a happy poem. Well done. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Susan Gentry
Date: 5/3/2018 12:38:00 AM
Thank you Joyce! :)
Date: 5/2/2018 3:29:00 PM
Dropping back to say many congratulations on your win Susan:-) hugs Jan xx
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Susan Gentry
Date: 5/3/2018 12:37:00 AM
Thanks so much Jan. :)
Date: 5/2/2018 2:15:00 PM
You leave us in suspense, Susan. (And I love that feeling.) Congratulations on your win! Hugs, Carolyn
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Date: 5/3/2018 12:37:00 AM
lol Thanks Carolyn! :)
Date: 5/2/2018 12:50:00 PM
What could be in it? So exciting! Congratulations Susan.
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Susan Gentry
Date: 5/3/2018 12:36:00 AM
Thanks Jean! :)
Date: 5/2/2018 7:14:00 AM
Congrats on your win, Susan.
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Date: 5/2/2018 10:41:00 AM
Thanks Line! Back at ya! So many different and amazing takes on these three lines.
Date: 4/21/2018 11:19:00 AM
Excellent my friend...well crafted Susan...best of luck and stay in the poetic light...^WW^
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Susan Gentry
Date: 4/22/2018 12:09:00 PM
Thank you very much. :)
Date: 4/18/2018 8:53:00 AM
Enjoyed the story and the sewing machine pic! Reminds me of my grandma’s wash tub!
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Susan Gentry
Date: 4/18/2018 7:16:00 PM
Thanks Kim!
Date: 4/18/2018 8:29:00 AM
Well-told, sweet story in a well-written poem, Susan! Janice
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Susan Gentry
Date: 4/18/2018 7:15:00 PM
Thanks Janice.
Date: 4/18/2018 8:02:00 AM
Very nicely done, Susan. Love the mystery. Sincerely, Elaine
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Susan Gentry
Date: 4/18/2018 7:15:00 PM
Thanks Elaine!
Date: 4/18/2018 7:28:00 AM
Very nicely written, Susan, good luck in the contest. John
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Susan Gentry
Date: 4/18/2018 7:15:00 PM
Thanks John!
Date: 4/17/2018 7:07:00 AM
You blended the three lines seamlessly..around a story that feels so real!
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Susan Gentry
Date: 4/18/2018 12:21:00 AM
Thank you!
Date: 4/17/2018 1:56:00 AM
You took on the challenge and did it so well. I think this contest is particularly difficult. Way to go.
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Susan Gentry
Date: 4/18/2018 12:21:00 AM
Thanks Andrea. Yes I agree.
Date: 4/16/2018 3:40:00 PM
An excellent take on these contest prompts, Susan. I can imagine this entry on the winners' list. ~ We have a similar sewing machine, passed on from my grandparents. Regards // paul
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Susan Gentry
Date: 4/16/2018 8:25:00 PM
Thank you, Paul! What a treasure to pass along. Appreciate your input always.
Date: 4/16/2018 1:50:00 PM
Wonderful piece Susan...
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Susan Gentry
Date: 4/16/2018 3:08:00 PM
Thanks so much! You are so kind.
Date: 4/16/2018 1:47:00 PM
- When I look at the image of the sewing machine ... you travel far back in time, Susan - Sore eyes who worked in poor light, far into the night - A wonderful little story ... R.I.P. over Saras memory ... I think she died with her secret - Luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 4/16/2018 12:45:00 PM
I love the way you built up the suspense and the ending of the poem leaves the reader wanting to know more. Fabulous descriptive poem Susan, good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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