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Sea As Heaven

Pain came to me one day. More and more it came around, and seeming to enjoy itself, it stayed. I begged for it to leave, but Pain is merciless and unremitting. A long time passed and then one day, as I lay in restful sleep, I found myself in the middle of the sea; my bed had become a little boat. As if by intuition, I knew that if I jumped into that sea, Pain would flee from me, and so. . . . I plunged myself into the deep blue waters and felt the sea’s welcoming embrace. Suddenly a new pain came to me. Its name was Terror. It suffocated me as I struggled instinctively against it. However, as I started to let myself relax, the sea began to pull me slowly downward. Down, down, down I sank to its bosom, tasting its sweet salty breath as it stole the very breath from me! Sun-warmed water wrapped me like a comforter. vanishing old Pain as well as that new pain known as Terror. Relaxing into the deep, completely I surrendered. And I realized while relishing relief. . . . surely it was Heaven. For Gautami Phookan's "In the Deep Sea Poetry Contest"

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Date: 5/18/2012 10:44:00 AM
A scary poem this, but a wonderful story, just wanted it to go on and on. congrats i believe for this deserved winner. harry
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Date: 4/10/2012 6:10:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved placement in Gautami's contest Andrea. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/6/2012 11:48:00 PM
Nicely penned on 'heaven',Andrea.Congratulations!
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Date: 4/6/2012 3:09:00 AM
Nice and haunting , hope the pain is gone with out that leap. congratulations xx
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Date: 4/6/2012 1:33:00 AM
congrats Andrea on a wonderful write and well deserved win for another rare beauty poem .. happy easter blessings too luv from Italy to Utah..
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Date: 4/5/2012 8:23:00 PM
Great Job!!! Very creative...:)
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Date: 4/5/2012 6:59:00 PM
Congrad's on your win! very TRUE write hope you feel better and better!
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Date: 4/5/2012 4:12:00 PM
Splendidly done with some very beautiful lines... Many Congratulations on your win and thank you so much for supporting my contest. love, gautami
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Date: 4/2/2012 2:46:00 PM
Ah yes, asleep in the deep. Exploring Davey Jones' locker. I used to fantasize floating forever down a river surrounded by wonderful foliage. Something about the water. Enjoyed. Love, daver
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Date: 4/1/2012 3:28:00 PM
A peaceful sense for the souls who have truly parished that way. I think we can all say that drowning is an insane fear. But the beautiful calm quiet's the fear.
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Date: 4/1/2012 9:31:00 AM
wow,such a beautiful piece
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Date: 3/31/2012 11:17:00 AM
Excellent piece of poetry... Love how it flows like the sea into Heaven... what I meant was a Karaoke Duet!!! lol but heay a poetry collab with you would be a blast!!! let me know..luv Michael
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Date: 3/31/2012 9:07:00 AM
They sea is calm and healing but water and drowning is my terror. I like the unique way you did this poem. Nice thinking. love phyl
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Date: 3/30/2012 7:53:00 PM
Always liked the ocean. As you say - it can heal you. Nice verse! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 3/30/2012 7:11:00 PM
Very good imagery here.An interesting take on the contest theme.Best wishes Andrea.
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Date: 3/30/2012 3:07:00 PM
Scary when thinking in literal terms..Good luck in the contest..Reads like a winner to me..Enjoyed reading this afternoon..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Date: 3/30/2012 11:03:00 AM
hmmm a strange heaven..ah but perhaps being free of pain is your heaven? yet life is pain in many senses Andie. I wish you more restful sleep. Light & Love
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Date: 3/30/2012 11:00:00 AM
Andrea, this is fantastic! Beautiful wording and flow. Best wishes in the contest. Love, Kim
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Date: 3/30/2012 9:43:00 AM
an elegant and dramatic write Andrea on the pull of the sea and it's various effect on the human soul..good luck in Gautami's contest.. definitely a top winner .. am having zero success with photos and Ron has no patience left to tinkr with instructions today.. tonight.. just came from doc checkup.. a ok for now..till therapy begins..
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Date: 3/30/2012 9:37:00 AM
Well thought words..............George
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Date: 3/30/2012 7:27:00 AM
quite a journey, well stated, although i was hoping as i neared the end, that you would wake up from a dream while lying on the sunny sandy beach - but we all know fairy tales dont always work. well done, thank you, chuck
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Date: 3/30/2012 6:34:00 AM
Where did this week go I wonder again. I have enjoyed reading your poetry this morning Andrea and the best to you in the contest. I hope you have a wonderful weekend filled with joy and happiness. Keep writing and sharing your poetry. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/30/2012 4:54:00 AM
Your poem warmed me Andrea, very lovely. - Luck to you in contest! - Have a weekend in love and sunshine. - oxox Anne-Lise
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Date: 3/30/2012 1:29:00 AM
Andrea I like the twist in this one and can feel the terror, goo dluck..David
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Date: 3/30/2012 12:31:00 AM
Andrea!! It's been a long time since I have visited you. Your piece is so creative. I like the way how you work on to vanished the pain and the terror by learning to let go and relax! I have not been writing lately. I'm prolonging my relaxation I guess! Love Dalila Dalila
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