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early morning as day blinked its eyes I rowed a little dory out - smooth rivulets behind me in the mirror surface. I stopped in the middle wrapping the misty silence around me straining to remember the town as it had been yes, it would be about here - the cemetery - they moved all the graves they could before the deluge but many remained for age or obscurity's sake it was there she first kissed me we went daily for the quietus and privacy to do afternoon homework (and split the atom) there, friendship became... more like crocuses rushing to spring we bloomed under the brooding arms of a grumpy elm branches twisting as if to keep our callow sins a secret so precious, those moments - so ... distant now - a flood and a lifetime later - it all decayed in the merciless murk ... an entire town given to the abyss for the thirst of a city miles away not a thought given to our town's tragedy no laurel laid upon these somber depths the feelings I pondered there in stillness had no precedent half my life and countless memories swimming far below in unforgiving darkness - homes, streets, schools, churches gardens of stone ... drowned for progress and population now, I committed a like crime - fishing my wallet from a corduroy pocket I removed her photo from its honored sheath (where it had slept for years) placed it ever-so-tenderly on the lake's surface, and watched it slowly lilt to the inky depths with my youth... and her memory.

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Date: 1/17/2022 2:02:00 PM
This is wonderful, Greg! Very well-written! An enjoyable read! Congrats on your win in Brian's contest! Blessings, Kim M
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Date: 1/16/2022 6:37:00 PM
Fantastic. Just a great ride from start to finish.
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Date: 1/16/2022 11:07:00 AM
Bitter sweet memories set adrift and released. Brilliant Greg! Congratulations on your win. Blessings xxoo
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Date: 1/16/2022 7:18:00 AM
Very emotive, expressive and descriptive work you have penned in this one. I can feel the sadness. Congrats on your work being in the winner's list. Sara
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Date: 1/16/2022 6:36:00 AM
Indeed, a great work. "with my youth... and her memory." - Beautiful. Congratulations!
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Date: 12/21/2021 8:31:00 AM
What a story/write. I loved your picture and wonderful ending. Have a Blessed Christmas.....................
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Date: 11/23/2021 6:40:00 PM
Greg my friend, your poetry always stays in the top class as if born by one of the great golden poets of old. Such constant level of exceptional poetry must come from a master poet, imho. Always a true pleasure to read. A fav,, God bless..
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Date: 11/22/2021 7:52:00 PM
This one moved me. I feel your pain and emptiness as you contemplate the past. Nicely written, this projects the feelings of seemingly senseless loss quite well.
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Date: 11/16/2021 11:45:00 AM
Hello Gregory Barden, this is a lovely way to say good bye to a love one. enjoy your day my friend.
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Date: 11/16/2021 6:38:00 AM
Brilliant! I believe I'd read this before - ? It seemed that I could remember... Beautiful either way. God bless you, Love, Gina
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